Customer: The shepherd’s pie that they sell here is the best.
Me: I’ve tasted better.
Customer: They use real beef, ...
Me: Not much of it ...
Customer: ... gravy, mashed potatoes, ...
Me: The gravy is from a bottle, and the potatoes from a mix.
Customer: ... corn, ...
Me: It’s very soupy. I think there’s more water in it than anything else.
After giving each other a strange look, we went our separate ways.
The world is full of wrong ideas that need to be corrected.
~end~
This is a prose poem.
It isn't clear to me if I should use italics for the actual dialogue, or italics for the designations of the speakers (as I have done).
At the Market One Day
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If you don't like the black theme, it is easy to switch to a lighter color. Just ask me how.
If I don't critique your poem, it is probably because I don't understand it.
If you don't like the black theme, it is easy to switch to a lighter color. Just ask me how.
If I don't critique your poem, it is probably because I don't understand it.
Quite enjoyed this Perry: the different mindsets and separateness of people's experiences conveyed in the subjectivity of 'tastes'; that crusader zeal to 'correct' the 'illusions' of others. I wonder which one is happier in their world.
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Thank you, Mac.
The last line of the poem is meant to be a joke. That line represents part of my character, so this poem is the poet making fun of himself.
I haven't been participating much because there wasn't much activity on the forum. I have been posting on the Waters forum on Tapatalk. There's a clique of egotistical people there, and they already hate me, so I may be coming back more often.
We need to find a way to promote this place. For me, the new name of the forum is a problem because it doesn't tell anyone what the forum is about.
The last line of the poem is meant to be a joke. That line represents part of my character, so this poem is the poet making fun of himself.
I haven't been participating much because there wasn't much activity on the forum. I have been posting on the Waters forum on Tapatalk. There's a clique of egotistical people there, and they already hate me, so I may be coming back more often.
We need to find a way to promote this place. For me, the new name of the forum is a problem because it doesn't tell anyone what the forum is about.
Signature info:
If you don't like the black theme, it is easy to switch to a lighter color. Just ask me how.
If I don't critique your poem, it is probably because I don't understand it.
If you don't like the black theme, it is easy to switch to a lighter color. Just ask me how.
If I don't critique your poem, it is probably because I don't understand it.