*text removed due to submission to the Foyles Poetry Competition, it will be returned in edited format at a later date*
(Hoping to expand, any ideas are welcome)
(also the prose is literally nameless, name ideas would be great)
Thankyou
Nameless Chaos
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Surely 'The sheer perfect chaos that codes your DNA is the same that forms the complexity of supernovas.' is rather the opposite of chaos?
I think you have a tendency to use adjectives because they sound good rather than for their meaning - what is 'perfect chaos'?
What is 'the theory of unique existence'? humans being unique, or each individual being unique? and what does it mean to be rooted in that theory?
I think you have some interesting ideas but need to be much more rigorous in what you're trying to say, and more exact in how you are expressing it, or it just sounds a bit new-agey.
Ros
I think you have a tendency to use adjectives because they sound good rather than for their meaning - what is 'perfect chaos'?
What is 'the theory of unique existence'? humans being unique, or each individual being unique? and what does it mean to be rooted in that theory?
I think you have some interesting ideas but need to be much more rigorous in what you're trying to say, and more exact in how you are expressing it, or it just sounds a bit new-agey.
Ros
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