The main reason it took me several days to post this was I could not get the end to work. At first I only got it to four lines, then as far as eight...David2 wrote:Terrific sense of menace in your first eight lines, Ian, which I think (sadly) is somewhat dissipated in the final six. That first section is great, though.
P.S. This exercise, after a slow start, seems to be turning out a treat.
...but the last six I quite agree, they're not quite there with the rest of it. Maybe I need to go more sinister throughout... in my head it was only sub-theme but I could bring it to the front.