I used to bend my head
towards on-coming trains
pressing
my ear on the steel tracks
listening
with glee and fear
the metallic
hiss from miles away
putting a ten pence piece on the rail
the coins that were flattened
seemed like the coins of kindness.
Tinnitus
Thanks John
The insane things you get up to when you were a kid? Or was it just me?
The insane things you get up to when you were a kid? Or was it just me?
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Counting the beats,
Counting the slow heart beats,
The bleeding to death of time in slow heart beats,
Wakeful they lie.
Robert Graves
Counting the slow heart beats,
The bleeding to death of time in slow heart beats,
Wakeful they lie.
Robert Graves
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CalebPerry
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I like this! I definitely like it! So much subtlety and implied meaning!
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If you don't like the black theme, it is easy to switch to a lighter color. Just ask me how.
If I don't critique your poem, it is probably because I don't understand it.
Thanks Mac, Caleb , glad you liked it.
Good job you weren't a teenager today John, you might have been jumping rooftops with a self-stick and phone in hand
Tony
Good job you weren't a teenager today John, you might have been jumping rooftops with a self-stick and phone in hand
Tony
Counting the beats,
Counting the slow heart beats,
The bleeding to death of time in slow heart beats,
Wakeful they lie.
Robert Graves
Counting the slow heart beats,
The bleeding to death of time in slow heart beats,
Wakeful they lie.
Robert Graves