First published poem

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the stranger
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Sun Dec 31, 2023 2:16 am

I read all the others first
just to check they were
Poets, writing poems in
a poetical way. They
seemed to be, but what
did I know?

My words where there
on the page, but they
didn’t seem real, like
they couldn’t possibly
have be born from me.

But now I see; they have
my eyes, my dress-sense
my unrelenting belief
that I am a poet

Or pretend to be.
jisbell00
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Sun Dec 31, 2023 6:48 am

Hi TS,

I like the first stanza. The subsequent conceit is pleasant, though I am struck by dress sense so soon after their birth. Perhaps my ten fingers and ten toes?

Cheers,
John
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