Nothing Goes to Waste
From diabetes I know there is sugar
in my pee, and from my kidneys, protein;
and with all the salt I put on everything,
I’m certain sodium is in there too,
not to mention that it smells like treacle.
Now if I froze it, churned it, could I serve it
to my friends as salted caramel sorbet?
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(I've made slight changes to the poem since I first posted it.)
I'm aware that a poem like this really needs to be perfectly rhymed and metered. I'll work on it.
I hope everyone enjoys the holidays.
Nothing Goes to Waste
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If you don't like the black theme, it is easy to switch to a lighter color. Just ask me how.
If I don't critique your poem, it is probably because I don't understand it.
If you don't like the black theme, it is easy to switch to a lighter color. Just ask me how.
If I don't critique your poem, it is probably because I don't understand it.