My geode

[ton321]

If I lift you

like a crusty fruit

towards the sun-

a sea urchin of the earth,


its because I want to find

the secret

of your undying love.

[NotQuiteSure]

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Hi Tony,
intriguing.
I liked the 'crusty fruit' but was then thrown by the 'sea urchin'.
Perhaps 'you sea urchin of the earth'?
The ending might need a bit of work.

Regards, Not

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[Macavity]

I like it too T. Great title.

Some options...

If I lift you

like a crusty fruit

towards the sun --

a sea urchin of the earth,


its because I want to feel

the secret

of your undying love.

[David]

I really like this, and the sea urchin comparison, but the undying love took me a bit by surprise.

Cheers

David

[jisbell00]

Hi Tony,

I like this too, especially the comparison, but like David I've nto wrapped my head yet around the conclusion. Do geodes feel love? And for what or whom?

Cheers,
John

[ton321]

Thanks for the replies. Its a bit of a weird one. Mineral conscience. Do right for the geodes!