9th letter

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littlebirdsaved
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Thu Nov 25, 2021 3:07 pm

Is “I” a univocal term?
No matter when or how I say it, it means oversleeping and unpaired socks.
Except being the 9th letter of the English alphabet, “I” enjoys making love,
singing loudly, and remembering random quotes.

“I” cannot write poetry sober, drinks too much, and gets angry.
“I” has a crack between its thighs that it repeatedly tries to stitch.
“I” cries in pain and makes stupid decisions.

“I” sometimes wishes to be something else but is too scared of change.

“I” searches.
It has multiple voices.

“I” is not univocal.
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Fri Nov 26, 2021 6:31 am

I was kind of getting the poem until the "crack between its thighs" line.

To be honest, I'm not sure what "univocal" means -- is that just another way to say "singular"?

I'm also not why sure why "I searches" indicates some kind of plurality.

I like the tenor of the language, but don't really get the poem.
If you don't like the black theme, it is easy to switch to a lighter color. Just ask me how.

If I don't critique your poem, it is probably because I don't understand it.
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Fri Nov 26, 2021 12:43 pm

Hello, thank you for the comment! I really appreciate it.

Univocal means something that has only one meaning, for example, "photosynthesis." So the point of the poem was that "I" does not have only one voice and constantly changes, looking for itself.

Regards!
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Sat Nov 27, 2021 12:21 am

I like the passion and the underlying sexual tension in this poem. That said: As a writer you have to ask yourself: If Fyodor Dostoevsky asked me any question about my poem, how would i hold up?
Is “I” a univocal term?
I'd say you'd fold in a whim, in a second.

When writing about such huge existential subjects, you have to be confident of your answers.

We have all written "Deep" stuff, we have all mostly failed.

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