Her Husband Reads The Book of Martyrs (revision)

[Macavity]

Revision


She hammers a nail in the wood,
her pointed action works.
It empties her head, no need
for words, the hammer nod
will do. She hangs a picture
to prove there's no problem.
She is a handyman.
She hammers like a Roman.


Original

She hammers a nail in the wood,
her volume action works.
It empties her head, no need
for words, the verbal nod
will do. She hangs a picture
to prove there's no problem.
She is a handyman.
She hammers like a Roman.

[jisbell00]

Hi Phil,

I think the last four lines are well worth the price of admission!

I'm not sure how to parse this; "her volume action works"

Cheers,
John

Oh - also a lovely title.

[Macavity]

Cheers John. 'volume' - external noise to release the internal noise. Probably too buried. Will edit.

Bw

Phil

[jisbell00]

Hi Phil,

Yes, volume action seems a bit out of the way to me.

Cheers,
John