Over the Hills and Far Away

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jisbell00
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Wed Aug 16, 2023 8:59 am

Over the Hills and Far Away


Listen to the wood thrush; there, there, at the edge of sound.
It is all so very unlikely. Try calling
back to her, she will welcome the company.

Out here, the sun seems a little closer.
Let the rays
dazzle your eyes a moment as you look up –

you are standing on solid ground.
Walk on, walk on.
Every one of these roads will lead you home.
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Wed Aug 16, 2023 1:25 pm

Whimsical and warming John. Folktales can come true😃
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Wed Aug 16, 2023 1:40 pm

Thanks Phil - glad you enjoyed this little ditty! It does have elements of folk tale, doesn't it?

Cheers,
John
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Wed Aug 16, 2023 1:54 pm

John, this had me thinking of a nursery rhyme:

Three little ducks went swimming one day,
Over the hills and far away,
Mother duck said quack, quack, quack
But only two little ducks swam back.

Two little ducks went swimming one day
Over the hills and far away...

Also, "walk on, walk on..." is Gerry and the Pacemakers but with all roads leading to Rome rather than hope in your heart. So it's a bit of a medley mash. I think it works better if I ignore those distractions.
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Wed Aug 16, 2023 2:00 pm

Hi Morph,

So that's where I got the title from! I knew the phrase but had forgotten the nursery rhyme, thanks for reminding me. I think the Gerry and the Pacemakers was an unintended echo. :)

Cheers,
John
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Wed Aug 16, 2023 4:54 pm

Greetings, John!

The title is familiar to the Coo-mmunity too, possibly from a nursery rhyme. It's pleasant to listen to the wood thrush. Would you consider assigning a gender to the bird, to add to the fairy-tale feel? We're not sure about the repetition 'it, it', unless that's intended as a bird call? (*v*)

The next two verses are pleasant too. I have fond memories of standing and walking. We too are experiencing something of a medley mash here (^v^)

Cheerie,
F & (^v^)
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Thu Aug 17, 2023 3:51 am

Greetings, Fliss and Coo!

I think your source is likely the nursery rhyme Morph quotes from. Yup, the wood thrush is welcome here! I could indeed look into assigning it a gender.

Glad you like the next two verses as well. Walk on does sound a bit Liverpudlian, but that was not on my mind, i believe, when i wrote this.

Cheerie,
John
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