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jisbell00
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Fame


I’ve traced an arc around the world.
I’ve cut a path into the air.
You’ll find the flag I fly unfurled
on the seabed. And while you’re there,

look for the fish that speak my name.
I’ve sifted gold out of the rock,
but winning is a futile game
without an umpire or a clock

to mark the hour, to say I’ve won.
I’ve lingered on – I am sincere –
and thought of what I haven’t done.
I’ve heaved a sigh. I’ve shed a tear.


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Mon Jul 24, 2023 7:10 pm

Especially like the fish line John. Never sought fame myself, though I could do with a few less rejections from ezines :lol: Fun poem with a relevant perspective. Unfurl the flag!

Bw

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Mon Jul 24, 2023 8:01 pm

Hi Phil,

Glad you enjoyed this! Lots of persona poems in this MS., as here. Fame I suspect is a two-edged sword, but I would enjoy more folks reading my poetry! Though I always value your take.
The fish are fun, aren’t they? And best of luck with the e zines!

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John
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Tue Jul 25, 2023 6:27 am

Agreed John. Readers are part of the poetry process. I don't find the same with painting.
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Tue Jul 25, 2023 6:47 am

Interesting! Maybe that reflects the fact that poems are speech acts, and thus communication - a listener or interlocutor - is central to them. Not so with painting.

CHeers,
John
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Poet/Poem/Reader...a trinity...the poet's intention, the poem's communication, the reader's incomprehension 🤣
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Hi Phil, hi Morph,

Phil - what a splendid trinity! I'm old and forgetful these days, but if I can remember that, I'll quote it with your permission.

Morph - a fine song and video! And very apt. I'd not heard of Lily Allen, so thank you.

CHeers,
John
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jisbell00 wrote:
Tue Jul 25, 2023 9:45 am

Morph - a fine song and video! And very apt. I'd not heard of Lily Allen, so thank you.

John, I'm surprised at that because when I arrived at Boston airport around the time this song was charting I heard it played on local radio on the shuttle bus so I concluded she must have a presence on the other side of the pond. Similarly, in Hawaii there were frequent Adele and One Direction numbers ringing out wherever we went.
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Ah! Now Adele, I know a bit. I could I guess listen to the radio ...

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Tue Jul 25, 2023 11:37 am

Of course, John. My wife is always quoting me for saying this and that...and me never remembering🤣
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Tue Jul 25, 2023 12:37 pm

Thank you Phil! I believe incomprehension is central to the poetic experience. :)

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