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Redacted by time
rules lost relevance. The hives
revelled in honey.
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revelled in honey.
transgressions vinegar tang
while the worlds eyes watch
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while the world's eyes watch
dragonflies skim lily ponds
in Monet's garden
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In Monet's garden
the willow leaves' dreamless sleep
wait across the bridge.
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wait across the bridge
when Ayahuasca calls to you
you belong to life
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you belong to life
a simple chamomile tea
lets the shaman nap
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lets the shaman nap
lifes fractal equation
meaning not reason
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Meaning not reason
flogs the heart to submission.
The brain wields the whip.
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The brain wields the whip.
The brain in a media vat
fish in a bait ball
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Fish in a bait ball
sphere of circular panic
fleeing to nowhere.
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fleeing to nowhere.
no habitat remaining
the last of great auk
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The last of great auk
strangled by sailors. Last egg
cracked dead by a boot.
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cracked dead by a boot
the history of future
short term gain made flesh
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Short term gain made flesh
the stock broker used a skull
to drink his profits.
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to drink his profits
his wife bought a rainforest
for orangutans
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four orangutans
three French hens, Alan
Partridge in a pear tree
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Partridge in pear tree
needs a ladder to descend
unless he’s red legged.
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unless he’s red legged
withstand winters bytter bite
he ney true Scotsman
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He ney true Scotsman
but cause he had done all
he couldnay settle.*

stolen from James Kelman
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he couldnay settle
though his croft was so tiny
the Laird's man said so
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the Laird's man said so
we will be fisherfolk now
or Americans
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Or Americans
who say, "This is not Nam,
it's just not." It is.
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it's just not. It is.
The Book guides us to freedom
The Gun enforces,
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The Gun enforces,
close your eyes, and so persists
her Damask perfume
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her damask perfume,
a courtyard of roses
come to mourn the dead
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