Herd Immunity

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Herd Immunity

Just a couple of pricks
can sway an electorate.


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Herd Immunity

The lesson of the campaign:
just a couple of pricks
can sway the electorate.


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Spot on!

Made me smile.

Cheers,

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Thanks Tristan, mac.
glad you enjoyed.

Regards, Not

Afterthought - would this work without the first line?

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Yes, I think it would work without the first line.

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Thanks Tristan,

regards, Not

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