climate, unchanged

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NotQuiteSure
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climate, unchanged

what could be greener
than recycling
promises


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Sun Nov 14, 2021 12:30 pm

:lol: Good one Not

Just Climate for the title?

or Boris Smirked
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Sun Nov 14, 2021 12:42 pm

Hi Not,

I like this one too. Do you need a question mark? :)

Best wishes,
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Sun Nov 14, 2021 1:19 pm

Hi mac, Fliss,
thanks for the comments.
Dithering over the title, mac, just be grateful I abandoned Cop-out 26!

I wasn't sure about a (rhetorical) question mark, Fliss, so omitted it and waited for reactions.
The polls are still open.

Regards, Not

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Sun Nov 14, 2021 3:12 pm

Brilliant Not. Really like this poem - its irony and sentiment. I like the title as is (climate, unchanged) though I think I’d do away with the comma, and have no punctuation at all including that question mark that Fliss mentioned.

Cheers,

Tristan

NotQuiteSure wrote:
Sun Nov 14, 2021 12:04 pm
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climate, unchanged

what could be greener
than recycling
promises


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Sun Nov 14, 2021 4:48 pm

Hi Tristan.
Glad you enjoyed. I think you're right, I'll cut the comma.

Thanks, Not

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