A good write Sean, smoothly written, one that engaged this reader.
best wishes
Mac
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- Tue Aug 23, 2005 8:55 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Langland Bay
- Replies: 17
- Views: 4028
- Tue Aug 23, 2005 8:46 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: still waters
- Replies: 4
- Views: 1435
- Sat Aug 20, 2005 8:48 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: still waters
- Replies: 4
- Views: 1435
Thanks Caleb. This is a tanka I've been struggling with for months :cry: It relates to the Tsunami, but without the news topicality I think it loses potency. One of the problems is the title, which was originally used for irony. The title just doesn't open a door now. Not sure about 'clenched teeth'...
- Sat Aug 20, 2005 8:49 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: FATHER OF MINE
- Replies: 4
- Views: 1385
I guess I could mend the limp line in question...two words...both featuring the f word! I guess in some ways the F word is the voice of the inarticulate and the impact is dulled. The publisher who's proposing to publish this however, is well known for family values, so there again..... Well comprom...
- Fri Aug 19, 2005 9:18 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Rights of Passage
- Replies: 8
- Views: 2529
Enjoyed this. I like Adamant/Emphatic as they are (italics would dilute - only a visual thing anyway) 'that sort of thing' - I'd keep it, like the sardonic tone 'Not enough for this farmer' let it be blunt, no need to compromise, I'd keep that too The last stanza is pretty, but is saved by the grit/...
- Fri Aug 19, 2005 9:06 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Manifesto
- Replies: 7
- Views: 2233
- Fri Aug 19, 2005 8:56 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: still waters
- Replies: 4
- Views: 1435
still waters
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- Thu Aug 18, 2005 8:12 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: FATHER OF MINE
- Replies: 4
- Views: 1385
- Thu Aug 18, 2005 8:08 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Unwritten
- Replies: 6
- Views: 1924
- Tue Aug 16, 2005 9:08 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: .
- Replies: 11
- Views: 3015
- Tue Jul 05, 2005 12:47 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: leaves
- Replies: 4
- Views: 1537
- Fri Jul 01, 2005 6:49 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Summer Days Revisited
- Replies: 2
- Views: 1063
- Fri Jul 01, 2005 6:42 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: leaves
- Replies: 4
- Views: 1537
- Fri Jul 01, 2005 6:35 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Tree
- Replies: 3
- Views: 1092
- Wed Jun 29, 2005 7:38 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: The Lawns of Stately Homes
- Replies: 6
- Views: 1696
- Wed Jun 29, 2005 7:32 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Old Young Men
- Replies: 13
- Views: 3877
- Wed Jun 29, 2005 7:26 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: leaves
- Replies: 4
- Views: 1537
leaves
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- Tue Jun 14, 2005 2:34 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Old Tom Bombadil
- Replies: 7
- Views: 1599
- Mon Jun 13, 2005 11:35 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Kitsch
- Replies: 3
- Views: 1289
- Mon Jun 06, 2005 11:21 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Comatose
- Replies: 5
- Views: 1531
'Half mummified in future glass, is how I see them. You may say half sunk in sand. Both have potential.' Like these lines: projects the mind beyond the present, defines a moment, the confines of past. 'potential'/'half' sense of transience/change. 'mummified'/'future' - signifies end of life/preserv...
- Mon Jun 06, 2005 11:06 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: leaves
- Replies: 2
- Views: 1043
- Fri Jun 03, 2005 12:49 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Moonlight Warmth.
- Replies: 6
- Views: 2054
- Fri Jun 03, 2005 12:39 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: leaves
- Replies: 2
- Views: 1043
leaves
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- Wed Jun 01, 2005 3:47 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Fenced In
- Replies: 3
- Views: 1240
- Mon May 30, 2005 8:14 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Suffocating In the Office Cubicle Part 2
- Replies: 2
- Views: 1053