Many thanks John, Lia, Fliss & Celeb.
Cheers,
Tristan
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- Thu Mar 02, 2023 7:50 pm
- Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
- Topic: Ray and Tristan in Snakeskin
- Replies: 8
- Views: 397
- Thu Mar 02, 2023 7:49 pm
- Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
- Topic: Miles & me in Lighten Up Online
- Replies: 9
- Views: 433
Re: Miles & me in Lighten Up Online
Many Congrats Fliss and Martin! Enjoyed all three poems. I especially like the word ‘tofurkey‘.
Many thanks both for sharing.
Cheers,
Tristan
Many thanks both for sharing.
Cheers,
Tristan
- Wed Mar 01, 2023 5:41 pm
- Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
- Topic: Ray and Tristan in Snakeskin
- Replies: 8
- Views: 397
Re: Ray and Tristan in Snakeskin
Many thanks Phil and Ray. ‘Help’ and ‘My Poems’ are my two favourites out of this batch too, Ray. Many congrats Ray! Much enjoyed ‘The Outside of Enough‘ and George’s snippet of Austen. Great reuse of the phrase.
Cheers,
Tristan
Cheers,
Tristan
- Wed Mar 01, 2023 5:38 pm
- Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
- Topic: The Dirigible Balloon (2)
- Replies: 7
- Views: 341
Re: The Dirigible Balloon (2)
Many congrats Fliss! Two excellent poems. Much enjoyed.
Cheers,
Tristan
Cheers,
Tristan
- Wed Mar 01, 2023 5:37 pm
- Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
- Topic: Caleb in London Grip
- Replies: 7
- Views: 346
Re: Caleb in London Grip
Much enjoyed Celeb. Well done!
Many congrats.
Cheers,
Tristan
Many congrats.
Cheers,
Tristan
- Tue Feb 21, 2023 11:22 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Mississippi John Hurt
- Replies: 15
- Views: 480
Re: Mississippi John Hurt
Hi John, I love this poem, not in least part I suspect because I grew up with Mississippi John Hurt being played by my dad, who was a huge fan, and ‘Stack O'Lee’ and ‘Pallet on the Floor’ are two classics by him. And this is so true A light shines out through every chord. All the books on my shelves...
- Thu Feb 16, 2023 6:53 pm
- Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
- Topic: Tentacular - Congratulations Tristan
- Replies: 5
- Views: 298
Re: Tentacular - Congratulations Tristan
Many thanks Phil and John. Really glad you enjoyed. Of course, it was a matter of pure luck this poem being selected for publication for this edition of Tentacular, as they had an algorithm choose the poem at random and that’s the reason this issue is called RANDOM. I really like the idea - a move a...
- Thu Feb 16, 2023 6:40 pm
- Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
- Topic: Amethyst
- Replies: 16
- Views: 687
Re: Amethyst
Hi John,
I read this poem last week when Fliss posted up a link to it on Twitter. As I said then, a lovely poem and well deserved publication.
Much enjoyed.
Many congrats.
Cheers,
Tristan
I read this poem last week when Fliss posted up a link to it on Twitter. As I said then, a lovely poem and well deserved publication.
Much enjoyed.
Many congrats.
Cheers,
Tristan
- Wed Feb 01, 2023 3:53 pm
- Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
- Topic: Nawr
- Replies: 9
- Views: 499
Re: Nawr
Many congrats Phil. Much enjoyed both.
Cheers,
Tristan
Cheers,
Tristan
- Wed Feb 01, 2023 3:51 pm
- Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
- Topic: CalebPerry is in Mobius again
- Replies: 12
- Views: 533
Re: CalebPerry is in Mobius again
Many congrats Celeb. Enjoyed the ending. It chimed well with the Journal’s mission.
Cheers,
Tristan
Cheers,
Tristan
- Wed Feb 01, 2023 3:45 pm
- Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
- Topic: Fliss in Snakeskin
- Replies: 4
- Views: 306
Fliss in Snakeskin
Many congrats to Fliss for getting the lead poem in February’s edition of Snakeskin with a great picture on the cover to complement it. Excellent poem. I have some shorts in there too and David has a poem too (many congrats David if you are out there. Enjoyed!). http://www.snakeskinpoetry.co.uk Chee...
- Mon Jan 23, 2023 10:22 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: La Donna È Mobile
- Replies: 2
- Views: 190
Re: La Donna È Mobile
Hi John,
I wasn’t familiar with the story line of this opera (but of course have heard it), but enjoyed the poem. My only nit would be the three ‘hes’ in stanza two. They grated a little.
Cheers,
Tristan
I wasn’t familiar with the story line of this opera (but of course have heard it), but enjoyed the poem. My only nit would be the three ‘hes’ in stanza two. They grated a little.
Cheers,
Tristan
- Mon Jan 23, 2023 10:16 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Congregation
- Replies: 23
- Views: 696
Re: Congregation
Hi Fliss,
Much enjoyed. I did stumble on ‘islette‘ - didn’t see your note at the bottom. It felt a little like it was there for the rhyme with ‘set’, but I’m no expert in these types of things.
An excellent poem though.
Cheers,
Tristan
Much enjoyed. I did stumble on ‘islette‘ - didn’t see your note at the bottom. It felt a little like it was there for the rhyme with ‘set’, but I’m no expert in these types of things.
An excellent poem though.
Cheers,
Tristan
- Sun Jan 08, 2023 11:07 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: She Danced
- Replies: 6
- Views: 509
Re: She Danced
Hi Namyn, Your poem moves along nicely and the end rhymes seem natural to me. I thought the first line of the stanza 4 was a little overdone with ‘twinkling glints of light’. Magic, witchcraft, tricks of sorcery! Who cares what was I play! (The phrasing of this line doesn’t seem right) She made me b...
- Sun Jan 08, 2023 10:14 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: second skin
- Replies: 5
- Views: 367
Re: second skin
Thanks John and Namyh. Pleased you like this short.
Thanks for reading.
Cheers,
Tristan
Thanks for reading.
Cheers,
Tristan
- Sun Jan 08, 2023 9:59 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Artish
- Replies: 4
- Views: 422
Re: Artish
Hi Kris,
For me this is a statement poem, which is fine. I agree with the sentiment, though I know statement poems aren’t really that fashionable at present, which I suppose the poem is partly about.
Thanks for sharing.
Cheers,
Tristan
For me this is a statement poem, which is fine. I agree with the sentiment, though I know statement poems aren’t really that fashionable at present, which I suppose the poem is partly about.
Thanks for sharing.
Cheers,
Tristan
- Sun Jan 08, 2023 9:55 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Good News for Modern Man
- Replies: 9
- Views: 469
Re: Good News for Modern Man
Hi John, Enjoyed the read. I agree with Mac about the pea line. A great line. I really like the opening stanza, but initially found the second stanza a bit of a leap from the first, but it made good sense on a second read, so I suspect this was just my poor reading skills. Enjoyed the final stanza t...
- Fri Jan 06, 2023 9:18 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: second skin
- Replies: 5
- Views: 367
Re: second skin
Hi Phil,
Pleased you like the concept. Don’t know how that question mark got there. It wasn’t meant to be there. Thanks for pointing out.
Cheers,
Tristan
Pleased you like the concept. Don’t know how that question mark got there. It wasn’t meant to be there. Thanks for pointing out.
Cheers,
Tristan
- Fri Jan 06, 2023 8:27 pm
- Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
- Topic: Klecksograph Ray and Me
- Replies: 9
- Views: 476
Re: Klecksograph Ray and Me
Lovely photo and poem Phil. Really enjoyed. One of your best collaborations I’d say. Enjoyed Rays poem too. I remember ‘Stella’ being posted here a while back. Brought a smile to my face again.
Many congrats both.
Cheers,
Tristan
Many congrats both.
Cheers,
Tristan
- Fri Jan 06, 2023 8:04 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: second skin
- Replies: 5
- Views: 367
second skin
3am
our cat
sees our duvet move
tries to bite
through
I twitch
he claws
we can’t be hurt
our cat
sees our duvet move
tries to bite
through
I twitch
he claws
we can’t be hurt
- Mon Jan 02, 2023 9:44 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Absolution
- Replies: 4
- Views: 247
Re: Absolution
Morning John, This is one of my favourites of yours. It’s dense with meaning, unexpected links in time and place and certainly travels. I love the ‘basso continuo’ and ‘the rush of birds that knots and unknots’ - perfect. Love the first line of the final stanza and the ending - excellent. I hope oth...
- Mon Dec 26, 2022 4:02 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Stations of the Cross
- Replies: 4
- Views: 230
Re: Stations of the Cross
Hi John, I like the ending very much but found a couple of lines a little cliched, which may not matter as they could be part of the voice. I’ve highlight then in red below. Back a ways, I posted this one to no comment. I've added a couple of stanzas at the end. :) Stations of the Cross The birds we...
- Mon Dec 26, 2022 12:27 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Stations of the Cross
- Replies: 4
- Views: 230
Re: Stations of the Cross
Hi John,
On my first pass, it reads really as normal. Much enjoyed. Will say more later, when I come in from our Boxing Day walk.
Cheers,
Tristan
On my first pass, it reads really as normal. Much enjoyed. Will say more later, when I come in from our Boxing Day walk.
Cheers,
Tristan
- Sun Dec 25, 2022 8:42 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Nobody Whatsoever
- Replies: 4
- Views: 256
Re: Nobody Whatsoever
Morning John,
Enjoyed. The only thing I’m not sure about is the repetition of ‘no water’. It stands out in such a short poem. Maybe it helps build that sense of its/the absence. Overall, thinks the poem works well.
Merry Christmas!
Cheers,
Tristan
Enjoyed. The only thing I’m not sure about is the repetition of ‘no water’. It stands out in such a short poem. Maybe it helps build that sense of its/the absence. Overall, thinks the poem works well.
Merry Christmas!
Cheers,
Tristan
- Fri Dec 23, 2022 9:32 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Joni Mitchell (version 3)
- Replies: 19
- Views: 851
Re: Joni Mitchell (slightly revised)
I think ‘with more grieving still to be done’ would make a good final line. Your final line at present is clearly implied by the rest of the poem.
Maybe this: ‘And more grieving is still to be done’.
Cheers,
Tristan
Maybe this: ‘And more grieving is still to be done’.
Cheers,
Tristan