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by Firebird
Thu Mar 02, 2023 7:50 pm
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: Ray and Tristan in Snakeskin
Replies: 8
Views: 397

Re: Ray and Tristan in Snakeskin

Many thanks John, Lia, Fliss & Celeb.

Cheers,

Tristan
by Firebird
Thu Mar 02, 2023 7:49 pm
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: Miles & me in Lighten Up Online
Replies: 9
Views: 433

Re: Miles & me in Lighten Up Online

Many Congrats Fliss and Martin! Enjoyed all three poems. I especially like the word ‘tofurkey‘.

Many thanks both for sharing.

Cheers,

Tristan
by Firebird
Wed Mar 01, 2023 5:41 pm
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: Ray and Tristan in Snakeskin
Replies: 8
Views: 397

Re: Ray and Tristan in Snakeskin

Many thanks Phil and Ray. ‘Help’ and ‘My Poems’ are my two favourites out of this batch too, Ray. Many congrats Ray! Much enjoyed ‘The Outside of Enough‘ and George’s snippet of Austen. Great reuse of the phrase.

Cheers,

Tristan
by Firebird
Wed Mar 01, 2023 5:38 pm
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: The Dirigible Balloon (2)
Replies: 7
Views: 341

Re: The Dirigible Balloon (2)

Many congrats Fliss! Two excellent poems. Much enjoyed.

Cheers,

Tristan
by Firebird
Wed Mar 01, 2023 5:37 pm
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: Caleb in London Grip
Replies: 7
Views: 346

Re: Caleb in London Grip

Much enjoyed Celeb. Well done!

Many congrats.

Cheers,

Tristan
by Firebird
Tue Feb 21, 2023 11:22 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Mississippi John Hurt
Replies: 15
Views: 480

Re: Mississippi John Hurt

Hi John, I love this poem, not in least part I suspect because I grew up with Mississippi John Hurt being played by my dad, who was a huge fan, and ‘Stack O'Lee’ and ‘Pallet on the Floor’ are two classics by him. And this is so true A light shines out through every chord. All the books on my shelves...
by Firebird
Thu Feb 16, 2023 6:53 pm
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: Tentacular - Congratulations Tristan
Replies: 5
Views: 298

Re: Tentacular - Congratulations Tristan

Many thanks Phil and John. Really glad you enjoyed. Of course, it was a matter of pure luck this poem being selected for publication for this edition of Tentacular, as they had an algorithm choose the poem at random and that’s the reason this issue is called RANDOM. I really like the idea - a move a...
by Firebird
Thu Feb 16, 2023 6:40 pm
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: Amethyst
Replies: 16
Views: 687

Re: Amethyst

Hi John,

I read this poem last week when Fliss posted up a link to it on Twitter. As I said then, a lovely poem and well deserved publication.

Much enjoyed.

Many congrats.

Cheers,

Tristan
by Firebird
Wed Feb 01, 2023 3:53 pm
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: Nawr
Replies: 9
Views: 499

Re: Nawr

Many congrats Phil. Much enjoyed both.

Cheers,

Tristan
by Firebird
Wed Feb 01, 2023 3:51 pm
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: CalebPerry is in Mobius again
Replies: 12
Views: 533

Re: CalebPerry is in Mobius again

Many congrats Celeb. Enjoyed the ending. It chimed well with the Journal’s mission.

Cheers,

Tristan
by Firebird
Wed Feb 01, 2023 3:45 pm
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: Fliss in Snakeskin
Replies: 4
Views: 306

Fliss in Snakeskin

Many congrats to Fliss for getting the lead poem in February’s edition of Snakeskin with a great picture on the cover to complement it. Excellent poem. I have some shorts in there too and David has a poem too (many congrats David if you are out there. Enjoyed!). http://www.snakeskinpoetry.co.uk Chee...
by Firebird
Mon Jan 23, 2023 10:22 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: La Donna È Mobile
Replies: 2
Views: 190

Re: La Donna È Mobile

Hi John,

I wasn’t familiar with the story line of this opera (but of course have heard it), but enjoyed the poem. My only nit would be the three ‘hes’ in stanza two. They grated a little.

Cheers,

Tristan
by Firebird
Mon Jan 23, 2023 10:16 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Congregation
Replies: 23
Views: 696

Re: Congregation

Hi Fliss,

Much enjoyed. I did stumble on ‘islette‘ - didn’t see your note at the bottom. It felt a little like it was there for the rhyme with ‘set’, but I’m no expert in these types of things.

An excellent poem though.

Cheers,

Tristan
by Firebird
Sun Jan 08, 2023 11:07 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: She Danced
Replies: 6
Views: 509

Re: She Danced

Hi Namyn, Your poem moves along nicely and the end rhymes seem natural to me. I thought the first line of the stanza 4 was a little overdone with ‘twinkling glints of light’. Magic, witchcraft, tricks of sorcery! Who cares what was I play! (The phrasing of this line doesn’t seem right) She made me b...
by Firebird
Sun Jan 08, 2023 10:14 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: second skin
Replies: 5
Views: 367

Re: second skin

Thanks John and Namyh. Pleased you like this short.

Thanks for reading.

Cheers,

Tristan
by Firebird
Sun Jan 08, 2023 9:59 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Artish
Replies: 4
Views: 422

Re: Artish

Hi Kris,

For me this is a statement poem, which is fine. I agree with the sentiment, though I know statement poems aren’t really that fashionable at present, which I suppose the poem is partly about.

Thanks for sharing.

Cheers,

Tristan
by Firebird
Sun Jan 08, 2023 9:55 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Good News for Modern Man
Replies: 9
Views: 469

Re: Good News for Modern Man

Hi John, Enjoyed the read. I agree with Mac about the pea line. A great line. I really like the opening stanza, but initially found the second stanza a bit of a leap from the first, but it made good sense on a second read, so I suspect this was just my poor reading skills. Enjoyed the final stanza t...
by Firebird
Fri Jan 06, 2023 9:18 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: second skin
Replies: 5
Views: 367

Re: second skin

Hi Phil,

Pleased you like the concept. Don’t know how that question mark got there. It wasn’t meant to be there. Thanks for pointing out.

Cheers,

Tristan
by Firebird
Fri Jan 06, 2023 8:27 pm
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: Klecksograph Ray and Me
Replies: 9
Views: 476

Re: Klecksograph Ray and Me

Lovely photo and poem Phil. Really enjoyed. One of your best collaborations I’d say. Enjoyed Rays poem too. I remember ‘Stella’ being posted here a while back. Brought a smile to my face again.

Many congrats both.

Cheers,

Tristan
by Firebird
Fri Jan 06, 2023 8:04 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: second skin
Replies: 5
Views: 367

second skin

3am
our cat
sees our duvet move
tries to bite
through
I twitch
he claws

we can’t be hurt
by Firebird
Mon Jan 02, 2023 9:44 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Absolution
Replies: 4
Views: 247

Re: Absolution

Morning John, This is one of my favourites of yours. It’s dense with meaning, unexpected links in time and place and certainly travels. I love the ‘basso continuo’ and ‘the rush of birds that knots and unknots’ - perfect. Love the first line of the final stanza and the ending - excellent. I hope oth...
by Firebird
Mon Dec 26, 2022 4:02 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Stations of the Cross
Replies: 4
Views: 230

Re: Stations of the Cross

Hi John, I like the ending very much but found a couple of lines a little cliched, which may not matter as they could be part of the voice. I’ve highlight then in red below. Back a ways, I posted this one to no comment. I've added a couple of stanzas at the end. :) Stations of the Cross The birds we...
by Firebird
Mon Dec 26, 2022 12:27 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Stations of the Cross
Replies: 4
Views: 230

Re: Stations of the Cross

Hi John,

On my first pass, it reads really as normal. Much enjoyed. Will say more later, when I come in from our Boxing Day walk.

Cheers,

Tristan
by Firebird
Sun Dec 25, 2022 8:42 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Nobody Whatsoever
Replies: 4
Views: 256

Re: Nobody Whatsoever

Morning John,

Enjoyed. The only thing I’m not sure about is the repetition of ‘no water’. It stands out in such a short poem. Maybe it helps build that sense of its/the absence. Overall, thinks the poem works well.

Merry Christmas!

Cheers,

Tristan
by Firebird
Fri Dec 23, 2022 9:32 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Joni Mitchell (version 3)
Replies: 19
Views: 851

Re: Joni Mitchell (slightly revised)

I think ‘with more grieving still to be done’ would make a good final line. Your final line at present is clearly implied by the rest of the poem.

Maybe this: ‘And more grieving is still to be done’.

Cheers,

Tristan