Strange that that link doesn't work, Caleb. I'm not sure what's gone wrong there.
David
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- Mon Dec 18, 2023 7:37 pm
- Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
- Topic: Dreich Planet 2
- Replies: 7
- Views: 411
- Mon Dec 18, 2023 5:37 pm
- Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
- Topic: The Ekphrastic Review - Duccio
- Replies: 4
- Views: 244
Re: The Ekphrastic Review - Duccio
Well done, John. I like the poem. I'm not sure the fish image actually works, but I wouldn't want to be violently negative about it. (Was that someone I know, I wonder.)
Cheers
David
Cheers
David
- Mon Dec 18, 2023 5:34 pm
- Forum: Hello, Good Evening and Welcome
- Topic: Happy Christmas!
- Replies: 2
- Views: 397
Happy Christmas!
I just got fed up of seeing the topic that was popping up at the top of this forum every time I logged in.
But happy Christmas anyway.
David
But happy Christmas anyway.
David
- Sun Dec 17, 2023 6:00 pm
- Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
- Topic: Dreich Planet 2
- Replies: 7
- Views: 411
Re: Dreich Planet 2
It's just a one-off, John. That's been demanding enough. I'd hate to do it on a monthly basis. Hats off to them that do.
Cheers
David
Cheers
David
- Sun Dec 17, 2023 5:46 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Recumbent, he looks down
- Replies: 12
- Views: 408
Re: Recumbent, he looks down
Thanks John. This was just a test - quite a rigorous one - and I am just (well, not quite just) a drama queen. The results might have required me to undergo some sort of operation but, happily, I have them now and it seems that that won't be necessary. A nice pre-Christmas buck-up. Glad you're likin...
- Sun Dec 17, 2023 4:03 pm
- Forum: Any Other Business
- Topic: A forum to join if this one closes
- Replies: 3
- Views: 493
Re: A forum to join if this one closes
I have found a new forum which could become our new home (if Kris decides to close PAT) I don't think this one is beyond saving yet, Caleb. Let's hope it's not. This may be why some of you praise my poems with just a few words, and then say nothing else. It's true, the comments on poems are not usu...
- Sun Dec 17, 2023 3:43 pm
- Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
- Topic: Dreich Planet 2
- Replies: 7
- Views: 411
- Wed Dec 13, 2023 6:56 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Recumbent, he looks down
- Replies: 12
- Views: 408
Recumbent, he looks down
The room is Spartan, windowless and small. A clock is making faces on the wall. Left alone, until the doctor comes to catalogue my history and symptoms, I fall to contemplation of my feet, my comely ankles and my slender calves, that have conducted me through Skye and Crete to Etna’s slopes and San ...
- Wed Dec 13, 2023 6:55 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: He is taken in for his appointment
- Replies: 12
- Views: 362
Re: He is taken in for his appointment
Thanks John. (Especially for the Pope. He is a great man for couplets, isn't he?) It is, indeed, taken from life, and quite recently. And thank you Mac. Your quote reminds me that I was brought up, sharp, on the linen gown when I first posted this (elsewhere) - it was cotton, and I should have made ...
- Wed Dec 13, 2023 5:51 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: God-Seer
- Replies: 18
- Views: 343
Re: God-Seer
This sounds like a harrowing time, John. I think I agree with Mac that you could make more of Shekhinah - the details you've given us but don't use in the poem, for instance. She is an obscure one, isn't she? To me, at least. I wonder who you're addressing in V2. Again, this will probably have more ...
- Wed Dec 13, 2023 5:40 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Witchpricking
- Replies: 14
- Views: 507
Re: Witchpricking
The content is great, as usual, but the metre comes and goes for me. The first six lines are great - those galloping triplets (don't ask me what they're called, but you know what I mean) - but then L7 seems to limp along in quite a different rhythm. And that's what happens for the rest of the poem (...
- Wed Dec 13, 2023 5:17 pm
- Forum: Any Other Business
- Topic: The most miserable time of the year.
- Replies: 251
- Views: 60407
Re: The most miserable time of the year.
I started this thread 13 years ago, I wonder if anyone will still be up for it. A lot has changed in the world since then and, I think, the internet has become an angrier place. Anyway, here's the original remit: ----- Well, we're getting close to the most miserable time of the year so who's up for...
- Sat Dec 09, 2023 4:47 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Ode to My Eyebrows (version 3)
- Replies: 14
- Views: 275
Re: Ode to My Eyebrows
I quite enjoy the elevated language here, Caleb. It makes me think of an aging film star, famous for his looks, soliloquising (philosophically) in front of the mirror. I'm not sure about the ending either. I too would like to think that "the world / is moved by words, and not by force", bu...
- Sat Dec 09, 2023 4:30 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Wedding
- Replies: 9
- Views: 266
Re: Wedding
Great stuff, Ray. Have you tried doing this one in performance? (You used to do that sometimes, I think.) I imagine it would go down a treat. I did think the last line was - relatively speaking - a bit of a damp squib. Maybe there's something about it that I'm missing, but for me there's only one me...
- Sat Dec 09, 2023 4:05 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: At A and E.
- Replies: 12
- Views: 323
Re: At A and E.
I like it. I see Nasher's point about the start, but I like the details - they animate it, and they seem true to the experience to me. I particularly like "we might ride the bow wave of illness…." - still thinking about that, not being a very nautical sort, but it's a great line. Cheers Da...
- Sat Dec 09, 2023 3:41 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: He is taken in for his appointment
- Replies: 12
- Views: 362
He is taken in for his appointment
This has already been published - just recently, in Snakeskin - but it's the first of a longer sequence of poems, so I thought I might as well post it here before any of the others, so that you can follow the sequence ... Not with all my worldly goods do I endow this locker, just what I have on me ...
- Sat Dec 09, 2023 3:11 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Edifice of Grief
- Replies: 14
- Views: 243
Re: Edifice of Grief
I like this one, John. I also like Nash's 6-5-4-3-2-1 idea, but I'm going to blow that to high heaven (appropriately for the poem) by suggesting that you lose S2, which I think is too much in your didactic mode, to which you often turn. I'm not a great believer in "show, don't tell" - I th...
- Thu Dec 07, 2023 7:38 pm
- Forum: Forum News and Support
- Topic: Future of the Forum?
- Replies: 38
- Views: 1753
Re: Future of the Forum?
OK, nuff said. My hope is that others will post more, but I agree, I could usefully cut back, for the benefit not only of PAT, but of my own work. Let some air in the room. Thanks for making me think, as you so often do, David. Hi John. Thanks for approaching my presumptuous remarks so generously. ...
- Thu Dec 07, 2023 7:34 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: The Binding of Isaac
- Replies: 14
- Views: 225
Re: The Binding of Isaac
Christopher Smart's For I will consider my cat Geoffrey is a special favorite One of mine too. I like this about Smart, from Dr J ... "I did not think he ought to be shut up. His infirmities were not noxious to society. He insisted on people praying with him; and I’d as lief pray with Kit Smar...
- Wed Dec 06, 2023 6:38 pm
- Forum: Forum News and Support
- Topic: Future of the Forum?
- Replies: 38
- Views: 1753
Re: Future of the Forum?
As much as I admire John's ability as a poet, I feel that he has sucked some of the air out of the forum by posting a poem a day. I sometimes wonder whether I might get more critiques if he were posting less, although I understand it probably doesn't work that way. Let me balance that out by adding...
- Wed Dec 06, 2023 6:28 pm
- Forum: Forum News and Support
- Topic: Future of the Forum?
- Replies: 38
- Views: 1753
Re: Future of the Forum?
Hello David! Yep, 23 years in and still going! Funny how there's still a pull towards this place. Other than for business I don't really do the internet much anymore but popping back here has reminded me how much fun it used to be. I wonder if the Badcoes are lurking in the wings too. I bet they ar...
- Mon Dec 04, 2023 8:00 pm
- Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
- Topic: CalebPerry is in London Grip
- Replies: 5
- Views: 318
Re: CalebPerry is in London Grip
Well done, Caleb. I like both of those.
David
David
- Mon Dec 04, 2023 7:58 pm
- Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
- Topic: John, Fliss, Ray, David, and Tristan
- Replies: 10
- Views: 569
Re: John, Fliss, Ray, David, and Tristan
That's a good haul all right.Macavity wrote: ↑Sat Dec 02, 2023 5:02 amCongrats to all for their publication in Snakeskin
https://www.snakeskinpoetry.co.uk/
Bw
Phil
David
- Mon Dec 04, 2023 7:52 pm
- Forum: Forum News and Support
- Topic: Renewal Time!
- Replies: 9
- Views: 791
Re: Renewal Time!
I'm in.
- Mon Dec 04, 2023 7:45 pm
- Forum: Forum News and Support
- Topic: Future of the Forum?
- Replies: 38
- Views: 1753
Re: Future of the Forum?
Gnasher, delighted to see that you drop in from time to time. I have been doing that too, a bit more frequently just lately, although I've probably had a furlough of a few weeks now. Which I intend to break.
So Earthworks (I think it is) is still going? Good to know.
Cheers
David
So Earthworks (I think it is) is still going? Good to know.
Cheers
David