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Hi Ciaran :D For me the highlight was that being crushed-by-the-hands-of-a-clock-metaphor. Although it is a familiar message I quite liked that reversal in the last line. Do you need all of "goals, ambitions and dreams"? In the context they seem to amount to pretty much the same thing. If ...

Ta, JJ!

Big congrats, JJ.

Congrats, Mac.
Enjoyed all.

Seth

Macavity wrote:

David wrote:Never seen - or heard of - Allegro before. Any good?

of course, it will be good...when Seth is in there

Just checked the quality of the bios and there is mention of Antiphon...

And Seth will be there in June. The power of the cat poem.

Greetings, Ciaran

Thanks for the introduction and greeting. Welcome to PG.

Not read any Orwell in years...the last time was A Homage to Catalonia.

Seth

Aha! I see you have moved into your geometrical abstract phase!

It feels to me as if a bit of a fight is going on. I think Red is winning and is using the kind of hammers used to play vibes. Yellow is wisely holding back.

Very enjoyable.

Seth

A sweet, relaxed poem, JJ. Some nice lines as well... A tendril mist spiralled I heard two mute swans tut. We kissed and unzipped the tent. Especially the last one. With the same words it manages to nicely say what happened and imply that something will happen. Like Mac, not sure I grasp the idea of...

Thanks very much, Tristan! Thanks very much, Mac....well, naturally, I assume Mrs Mac is a woman of excellent taste. Strange to think it but the new Bangor Literary Journal is far closer to me in miles than any mag based in England. I can see Ireland from Mull, sometimes...but not England. I can't q...

Congrats, Tristan. Good un.

David wrote:Never seen - or heard of - Allegro before. Any good?

It was new to me. So I don't know. But I was so taken by the cat theme that I sifted through my files, tweaked and sent 4 short ones. Blame Mac!

Seth

Following on from Mac's recent appearance in the mag, I see Allegro has a call for poems on cats...http://www.allegropoetry.org/p/submit.html

Congrats, Mac!

Finally, an accurate portrayal!

(Written on behalf of the School Cleaner Poetry Apprecation Society).

Well done Ray!

Grim (in a good way)

Seth

The Clangers in a poem...excellent. Well done Mac!


(Written on behalf of the Clanger Poetry Appreciation Society)

Congrats, Tristan...I'll head over there now.

Greetings, James

It is easy to miss the rules when people first arrive. I am sure did. But we do have a 2-crits-for-1-posted-poem rule here. Just bringing the first rule to your attention if you missed it....viewtopic.php?f=25&t=3497

Ros wrote:I think it's a clever take on the original. Does rather depend on what the pea symbolises, though, and I'm not sure what to make of the last line.

Ros

With Ros.

One thought..could you cut "peas" in ln.2?

Seth

Greetings, RC Enjoyed it. Not heard any Mance Lipscomb in years. Nice you knew him. Nice memory to have. On the poem, I found my mind was straying because of the shortness of the lines that kept imposing breaks in the flow that had little to with the sense. Imho, the poem (as a reading experience) w...

Thanks, Tristan. I like "Innocence" as well. I like the role of the whitehorns. The broadcast on Kavanagh is here if anyone is interested. There are a few engaging bits, although it does rather follow the rural-upbringing/goes-to-Dublin/bit-of-a-grumpy-bastard/mellows-in-old-age pattern......

Reading some Kavanagh again after listening to a programme about him on Radio 3.

https://www.poetryarchive.org/poem/epic

Listening to a lot of Bill Frisell recently.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=hwItvSRvPNQ

Indeed, I liked AOO. The name won me over from the start. Perhaps it may come back in some form. I will keep an ear out.

https://algebraofowls.com/2016/09/02/li ... eth-crook/

Zoomorphic has a migration/movement call....

http://zoomorphic.net/submissions/

Hi, Jackie.....just calling by to say it is good to see you around.