I don't see a way to read the issue; it must be a print publication.
Congratulations, Ray.
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- Fri Mar 01, 2024 8:58 pm
- Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
- Topic: Ray in Kleksograph
- Replies: 2
- Views: 77
- Fri Mar 01, 2024 6:57 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Into the Wilderness (version 2)
- Replies: 10
- Views: 178
Into the Wilderness (version 2)
Into the Wilderness (version 2 -- free verse) As a hedge against damnation, the preacher made himself the strictest of the strict interpreters of precious texts, so to convince God of his impeccable faith; but men who hedge their faith are men who feign. When his reckoning came, God discerned his s...
- Thu Feb 29, 2024 6:09 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Unwrapping the Truth (version 3)
- Replies: 17
- Views: 212
Re: Unwrapping the Truth (version 3)
Thank you. I'll see what I can do to get rid of the explaining.
- Thu Feb 29, 2024 12:11 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Unwrapping the Truth (version 3)
- Replies: 17
- Views: 212
Re: Unwrapping the Truth (version 3)
Did I manage to improve the poem at all?
- Sun Feb 25, 2024 6:39 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: I’m sure my father wasn’t like me.
- Replies: 4
- Views: 76
Re: I’m sure my father wasn’t like me.
In my opinion, "deaf ears" is a bit of a cliché. I would go for something a little different:
Even though he is still alive I talk
about him in the past tense,
to myself, mostly, and to those
who never learned to listen.
Even though he is still alive I talk
about him in the past tense,
to myself, mostly, and to those
who never learned to listen.
- Sun Feb 25, 2024 5:24 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Unwrapping the Truth (version 3)
- Replies: 17
- Views: 212
Re: Unwrapping the Truth
Thanks for the suggestions, guys.
Believe it or not, I think the poem does need a little trimming, if only because phases like "symbolic meaning" aren't particularly poetic. I'll work on it, but I'll probably come up with something a little different.
The James Wright poem is interesting.
Believe it or not, I think the poem does need a little trimming, if only because phases like "symbolic meaning" aren't particularly poetic. I'll work on it, but I'll probably come up with something a little different.
The James Wright poem is interesting.
- Sun Feb 25, 2024 1:29 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Unwrapping the Truth (version 3)
- Replies: 17
- Views: 212
Re: Unwrapping the Truth
Thanks, Tony!
It may develop into something a little more.
It may develop into something a little more.
- Sat Feb 24, 2024 8:15 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Unwrapping the Truth (version 3)
- Replies: 17
- Views: 212
Unwrapping the Truth (version 3)
Unwrapping the Truth (version 3) The thumb print on the dust jacket of Alicia Stallings’ new book tells me more than that the Amazon clerk forgot to wash his hands after a lunch of fried chicken; compared to such blossoms as I find inside, my efforts are oily smudges, and my pride a grease trap fro...
- Sat Feb 24, 2024 6:30 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: A Brief History of God
- Replies: 2
- Views: 47
Re: A Brief History of God
I gather that Clay is a character in the Bible, right? I suspect there is a story in there that would make the meaning of this poem more apparent.
- Wed Feb 21, 2024 8:42 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Habibi
- Replies: 4
- Views: 80
Re: Habibi
I like the poem, John, but I'm too tired to critique it.
- Tue Feb 13, 2024 4:24 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Anhedonia
- Replies: 5
- Views: 123
Re: Anhedonia
I love the last stanza. The rest of it feels like it needs work. I'm not experiencing your usual excellent flow. I haven't scanned the meter, so I don't know if that's the problem. The rhyme, as you know, is uneven. It's interesting how writing poetry works. I was writing a poem once and the languag...
- Sat Feb 10, 2024 10:26 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: The Matchmaker (revised)
- Replies: 2
- Views: 111
Re: The Matchmaker
Thank you, John.
I tried cutting it down but decided that the story was in the details. I'll look at it again.
I tried cutting it down but decided that the story was in the details. I'll look at it again.
- Fri Feb 09, 2024 9:49 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: The Matchmaker (revised)
- Replies: 2
- Views: 111
The Matchmaker (revised)
The Matchmaker (a bit more concise, but not much) My co-worker wants to be a match-maker. What she gets from it, I don’t know, some masturbatory delight. She has a gay friend she wants me to meet. I say no, and then no again, and then again and again and again when she won’t shut up. I know how the...
- Thu Feb 08, 2024 5:30 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Of Love, Cuts and Caring
- Replies: 9
- Views: 333
Re: Of Love, Cuts and Caring
Thank you, John. I agree. On the other forum, someone suggested another ending mentioning a bandage (not the one I inserted here), and I wanted the opinion of this group, which seems to be more focussed on life-death issues.
- Thu Feb 08, 2024 2:02 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Of Love, Cuts and Caring
- Replies: 9
- Views: 333
Re: Of Love, Cuts and Caring
I am knocking this to the top because I now have two one-line endings, and I'd like to know which one the group prefers. Thanks!
- Tue Feb 06, 2024 12:00 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Hope
- Replies: 3
- Views: 108
Re: Hope
Thank you, guys. I'm aware that it is okay to write about the Big Issues (life, death, etc.), but I do want to bring something new to it.
- Tue Feb 06, 2024 11:24 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Hope
- Replies: 3
- Views: 108
Hope
Hope There are some things I can’t fathom, like the mother who sat by her sick and dying son for forty years, and was consumed by grief when he finally passed, but not by relief, and immediately sought out other sick people to care for. He’d become so feeble that he couldn’t move from his bed, coul...
- Sun Feb 04, 2024 1:26 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Deluded
- Replies: 3
- Views: 292
Re: Deluded
Stranger, I noticed that you hadn't gotten any responses to this poem, so I thought I would say something. I don't see a lot of artistry in it. The whole idea of poetry is to write what you are saying in a way that makes the language itself appeal to the mind. This poem sounds like a prosaic rant to...
- Sun Feb 04, 2024 1:14 pm
- Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
- Topic: Amethyst Review - No Earthbound Thing
- Replies: 6
- Views: 314
Re: Amethyst Review - No Earthbound Thing
Thank you, John. The contrived conversation on that site is a little hard to swallow, but I get the point.
- Sun Feb 04, 2024 8:44 am
- Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
- Topic: Amethyst Review - No Earthbound Thing
- Replies: 6
- Views: 314
Re: Amethyst Review - No Earthbound Thing
That's a gorgeous poem, John. You certainly have the knack for writing beautifully. I am putting that in my file of other authors' beautiful poetry.
Is "stamping grounds" another way of saying "stomping grounds"?
Is "stamping grounds" another way of saying "stomping grounds"?
- Sun Feb 04, 2024 8:14 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Of Love, Cuts and Caring
- Replies: 9
- Views: 333
Re: Of Love, Cuts and Caring
Thanks again! I visited a bunch of grammar sites. Most of them said both were right. I'll be using "whom".
- Sun Feb 04, 2024 6:31 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Of Love, Cuts and Caring
- Replies: 9
- Views: 333
Re: Of Love, Cuts and Caring
Thank you, John!
Sorry I haven't been participating much recently. I had a huge blow-up with a government agency to the point where I started to search for an attorney. My tension level was off the charts.
Which one is right, who or whom? Some grammar sites are telling me that both are okay.
Sorry I haven't been participating much recently. I had a huge blow-up with a government agency to the point where I started to search for an attorney. My tension level was off the charts.
Which one is right, who or whom? Some grammar sites are telling me that both are okay.
- Sun Feb 04, 2024 5:54 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Of Love, Cuts and Caring
- Replies: 9
- Views: 333
Of Love, Cuts and Caring
Of Love, Caring and Cuts “Thank you for caring for those you love.” That’s what the lid flap says on this box of Band-Aids. It doesn’t say, “Thank you for loving those you love” or “Thank you for caring for those you care for.” Those would be redundant. Is there a poet working at Johnson & John...
- Mon Jan 29, 2024 8:48 am
- Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
- Topic: Amethyst Review
- Replies: 5
- Views: 458
Re: Amethyst Review
That's a wonderful poem, John. Truly. Very nice ending.
I flamed out at Amethyst, not surprisingly.
I flamed out at Amethyst, not surprisingly.
- Sat Jan 27, 2024 10:40 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Annihilation
- Replies: 10
- Views: 696
Re: Annihilation
I'm also writing more in iambic tet, although my meter is looser than yours. I'll restrict myself to 8 or 9 syllables and let the beats fall where they choose to fall. However, I don't seem to be writing much lately. Hopefully that will end soon.