Poetry Forum

Something I reworked from Evelyn Waugh's vile bodies. I think it could work very well as a short dramaitc monologue, and obviously know exactly how to act it in my head, but could use some input... also I know I've probably stolen some bits from Stephen Fry's Bright young things. But it's a reworkin...

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=fnHR8uDZMto Also, from the new Manics album, with reworked Richie Edwards lyrics: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=L5jcqIMuIc4 I am a huge Manics fan, though I am very glad they continused after Richie Edwards death... seems to me Nicky Wire's lyrics have much more matu...

Cheers for your input. I think this poem is rather too dense - obviously the meaning is crystal clear in my head, but it is rather unaccessable. If there isn't enough in there at first glance to make a reader think "hey cool", it doesn't matter how much deeper meaning there is because the ...

I like. Which is definitly a result considering this is the type of music I almost never listen to. You may have opened doors for me.

Ah yes, the destructors, the most searched for Graham Greene story on google by virtue of Donnie Darko. :lol: A great little story though. I love how so many of his works make great films, "The Fallen Idol" is a great film, though falls short of the brilliance of the original short story &...

Getting through Crime and Punishment slowly, I'd like to say that it is because I don't want it to end and I'm drinking in every word, which is partly true, though to be honest somewhere in my student lifestyle I lost the stamina for novels. It is one of those texts that sparks off so many ideas in ...

I hope I'm not breaking any rules, but I posted this a while ago in the beginners forum. It's been redrafted and I think it's now ready to withstand the fury of the experienced forum... readyaimfire! On a Finger The years have turned its skin to another shade, With spring's light translucence wiring...

Good stuff, grabs your attention then goes on to make it worth your while. A good insight into the world of the damned - the whole thing fits together really well, the final image sets the whole thing into place for me. Thoroughly enjoyed this one.

Geat force and imagery, loved the end. Could help think of that Larkin poem that end "Such attics cleared of me! Such absences!". It's hard to accept that as an artist you can create something that goes beyond your our own sad little world, even though it was created within it - but you've...

Good imagery< I liked "cocoon sleep" especially.

Thanks, got another draft up now. Quite rewarding getting into the swing of revising a poem. Again, girl I like because it harks backs to youth in the way woman doesn't.

Yeah, I have that a lot - of course in my case it developed into a florid psychotic mania and I wound up in a psychiatric ward. Feeling much better now, thank you. But yes, I think it is often the downside of a creative mind. Manic Depression is termed the artist's disease for good reason, and like ...

Or my nice blue shoes
Will be torn about the heel
And the puddle leak

Thanks, I think you're right. Far and away my biggest influence is Larkin, so I'm looking to mix in the deep with obscene in my poetry - unfortunatly I'm not Philip larkin so it doesn't come off as well. I totally agree with the title, it needs to go - it was just an afterthought, I didn't have a ti...

Hi,

You made me smile, so thanks for that.
again, I could crit, but it's be rather like taking a hammer and chisel to a blow-up doll.

Always gotta love Morse, but then like most of the general public I've never actually read any of the novels so have no business mentioning him here really do I?

Hi, I like this a lot, the melting of the contrast and conflict of the erotic to the routine is brilliant. The lost potency... brill... The whole thing captures the warm pleasure of a enticed semi in yer trousers that never comes to fruition but was nice anyway. I'm struggling to find something to a...

And thus it came to pass that Joseph did leaveth the stable and drowned his sorrows in newly wined water.

The years have turned its skin to another shade, With spring's light translucence wiring the blood, And summer's heavy rays double tapping the grave And autumnal rains seeping through the opening pours The winter's darkening nights into hollow bone. That digit keeps present a static joint Encapsulat...

Yes, that is a good interpretation. I've always seen the priest and the doctor as primarily emblematic of man's frantic but horrifyingly futile desire to avoid death... but I think the strength of Larkin's poetry is that many of his poems contain a duplicity in meaning. I don't know what it is about...

I think there's a lot in that... To turn it on it's head I've heard it said that maths is the purest form of poetry. I think there is a kind of poetry in Maths, but you don't really get to see it untill you're at a high level or if that subject really turns you on... (alas, I am in neither group...)

I liked this, the change of tone with the italics worked well.

With discerning eyes,
I map your face, counting all
The hairs on your chin.

Hmm, " A crowd flowed over London Bridge, so many, I had not though death had undone so many. "? Yes, food for thought Wab, certainly. What is nationality, and is it important? I have no ready answers, but I have just finished reading "Brave New World", I'm reminded of the Savage...

Would Italy be allowed the likes of Marcus Aurelius and Cicero too?

Thomas More should really make the GB team IMO, "utopia" is a very important humanist work.

On that subject, where did Erasmus come from? *googles* Rotterdam, hmm, anyone else from the Netherlands to make a team with him?