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- Fri Sep 15, 2023 4:46 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: The Speaking World
- Replies: 8
- Views: 250
Re: The Speaking World
I really like this one, John. I am one of two, and now have two children, so I probably think too much along those lines. But I imagine that to be the third child feels rather like "... and here's another one". Certainly I remember the first days of parenthood being much less breathlessly ...
- Fri Sep 15, 2023 4:39 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: The Panopticon (Revision 3)
- Replies: 19
- Views: 372
Re: The Panopticon
Okay. Engaging brain ... but teatime approacheth.
- Fri Sep 15, 2023 4:38 pm
- Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
- Topic: David in Ink Sweat and Tears
- Replies: 6
- Views: 324
Re: David in Ink Sweat and Tears
Thanks Morph!
David
David
- Fri Sep 15, 2023 4:36 pm
- Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
- Topic: CalebPerry is in Pulsebeat
- Replies: 6
- Views: 301
Re: CalebPerry is in Pulsebeat
Congratulations Caleb. I like that one. A rare venture into rhyming for you? I don't remember seeing many others.
David
David
- Fri Sep 15, 2023 4:34 pm
- Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
- Topic: Streetcake (1)
- Replies: 9
- Views: 439
Re: Streetcake (1)
Well done Phil. (Strange to see one of these without Seth in. But you're a regular visitor too.)
I like your parallel universe image.
David
I like your parallel universe image.
David
- Fri Sep 15, 2023 4:27 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: The Panopticon (Revision 3)
- Replies: 19
- Views: 372
Re: The Panopticon
Okay ... do we need to do a Turing test on this one first?
- Thu Sep 14, 2023 6:37 pm
- Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
- Topic: David in Ink Sweat and Tears
- Replies: 6
- Views: 324
Re: David in Ink Sweat and Tears
Ah, thank ye kindly, Phil. Nice of you to share this. I had forgotten the collegiality here. (It's less well-developed than it used to be, I think, but there are still traces of it.) Thanks John. the kingdom of the corner of the eye. Yer've still got it, mate. Thanks Ray. This is quite an old one no...
- Wed Sep 13, 2023 6:29 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: This Is Freedom
- Replies: 22
- Views: 538
Re: This Is Freedom
Can Villa be regarded as parochial? Other than that, it seems a weird response. I can imagine a US magazine rejecting it on those grounds, but I can't imagine them using the word "parochial" - or do they have parishes too?
- Wed Sep 13, 2023 6:15 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Math
- Replies: 9
- Views: 281
Re: Math
Hi John. I do too! Thank you for trusting me on this. I just hope someone else will happen along and tell us that your trust hasn't been misplaced.
Cheers
David
Cheers
David
- Tue Sep 12, 2023 6:11 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Math
- Replies: 9
- Views: 281
Re: Math
This is a touching story, John. I cherish the dreams in which the dead reappear. They don't come around often enough, really. But is there a little bit too much of the unnecessary in this? I humbly suggest there may be ... My work moves forward. I was up last night reviewing French philosophers - it...
- Tue Sep 12, 2023 5:45 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: A Poem for Your Tooth (Revision 5)
- Replies: 31
- Views: 714
Re: A Poem for Your Tooth (Revision 3)
I can see that this would work very well in real life, and that's a good thing. You've desweetened it pretty effectively from that first high-saccharine effort, just leaving a couple of unsatisfactory bits and bobs for me. The stress seems to fall in the wrong place in L1, leaving "who" lo...
- Tue Sep 12, 2023 4:45 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: The polarity-Inverter.
- Replies: 5
- Views: 203
Re: The polarity-Inverter.
Yes, enjoyed it. It sounds very Dr Who (maybe an offshoot of his sonic screwdriver). The form - the terse repeating lines, with that much more voluble S4 - works very well.
I think John is right about that last line.
Cheers
David
I think John is right about that last line.
Cheers
David
- Mon Sep 11, 2023 6:25 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Jackdaws
- Replies: 15
- Views: 416
Re: Jackdaws
Cheers Ton. That ending may need a little revisiting. That's cleared the confusion not a jot. The jackdaw is talking to someone he thinks is Odin? Wherefore and why? This may not be much help either, but Odin ysed to talk to the birds (he was known for it), and they used to talk to him. Michael, you...
- Fri Sep 08, 2023 5:18 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: That One’s Me
- Replies: 12
- Views: 383
Re: That One’s Me
Another great ramble. I couldn't work out how the ferry could have taken you to such a place as the Thomas De La Rue In, so I looked it up. It's Guernsey, so that makes sense now. (Still there too, apparently.) Lots of good stuff, of course, but the Girl Guide badges were a highlight for me. I have ...
- Fri Sep 08, 2023 5:09 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Jackdaws
- Replies: 15
- Views: 416
Re: Jackdaws
Thanks Ray. Some ghost of that phrase has been loitering at the edge of my mind, and you've pinned it down. That makes me think I probably do need to revisit that wording. That's not Odin at the end, that's the jackdaw, with a fag in its mouth, being all ominous and premonitory. To me this is a clim...
- Fri Sep 08, 2023 4:05 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Birthday Asters
- Replies: 9
- Views: 213
Re: Birthday Asters
A nice vignette, John. "Columbarium" is new to me - a welcome guest.
Cheers
David
Cheers
David
- Thu Sep 07, 2023 4:55 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Jackdaws
- Replies: 15
- Views: 416
Re: Jackdaws
Thanks, John and Phil. Line 2 is probably a bit long, isn't it? I could drop "brief", perhaps.
The opening line is my hommage to John Clare, who started so many poems "I love ..."
I do like jackdaws. And I love John Clare.
Cheers
David
The opening line is my hommage to John Clare, who started so many poems "I love ..."
I do like jackdaws. And I love John Clare.
Cheers
David
- Wed Sep 06, 2023 4:29 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Jackdaws
- Replies: 15
- Views: 416
Jackdaws
I love their little martial jauntiness – comic carabinieri, all puffed up with a brief temporary dignity put on like an older sibling’s coat, soon doffed when something bigger makes them jump. Cars. Disdainful rooks. Mothers with prams. And this one, on a post outside the pub, has picked up a sodden...
- Sun Sep 03, 2023 6:55 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: The Rest.
- Replies: 10
- Views: 371
Re: The Rest.
A bit of a red wheelbarrow vibe to this? It does have a sort of haiku feel to it, too. Starting from what you've given us here, the possibilities seem endless. What might happen? What is significant? Quite an achievement, for a few brief lines.
Cheers
David
Cheers
David
- Sun Sep 03, 2023 6:46 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: "Stookey", apparently
- Replies: 17
- Views: 460
Re: "Stookey", apparently
How dare you! If we're famed for anything, it's being flat. I'll refer you to this poem: https://proleartthreat.co.uk/forum/viewtopic.php?f=3&t=551&p=1738#p1738 I'm so pleased all that stuff is still there, intact. I still refer to it, sometimes, when I wonder what was said about an old poe...
- Sun Sep 03, 2023 6:39 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: "Stookey", apparently
- Replies: 17
- Views: 460
- Sun Sep 03, 2023 6:38 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: "Stookey", apparently
- Replies: 17
- Views: 460
Re: "Stookey", apparently
flat without the attendant fame – How dare you! If we're famed for anything, it's being flat. I'll refer you to this poem: https://proleartthreat.co.uk/forum/viewtopic.php?f=3&t=551&p=1738#p1738 Nice work of course, but my appreciation of it lessens because I don't understand the " Sto...
- Sun Sep 03, 2023 6:29 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: "Stookey", apparently
- Replies: 17
- Views: 460
Re: "Stookey", apparently
Hi David, just a couple of comma suggestions: one after 'Norfolk' (I like the idea that N has resolved more than once.) and the other after 'Walsingham'. Like Lia's idea about moving 'flat' to L3. (Thanks for the Henry VIII explanation, that was puzzling me.) Regards, Not . Thanks for looking in, N...
- Sun Sep 03, 2023 6:24 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: "Stookey", apparently
- Replies: 17
- Views: 460
- Sun Sep 03, 2023 6:19 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: "Stookey", apparently
- Replies: 17
- Views: 460
Re: "Stookey", apparently
I once arrived at Lincoln after dark, aged eleven, and the cathedral appeared to be floating in midair: Lincoln at least is on a hill, but i think the rest of the county is fairly flat. Cheers, John I remember that climb too, John. It made it feel - just a little bit - like an Italian hill-town, wi...