Poetry Forum

Yes, I thought these were more interesting than most such lists.

Thanks, chaps. I know it's barely half a poem but I got stuck, and thought some feedback might be useful (which it is). I'll see if it can be formed into a poem - quite possibly it's a daft idea...

Ros

This is powerful and moving. I think some of the metaphors are still stretching the experience a little too far and don't quite feel real. I'm finding that in particular with v3 Outrage is hot as a smacked cheek, queasy with the sea swell but the shell of his eye is soft as an oyster, his mind loose...

Of this I am certain. That the universe is full of matter and gravity pulls all matter together. That the expansion of the universe has not been slowing, as predicted, but accelerating. You needed space and it listened, the universe, to you. Its sixty eight percent dark energy pressed matter’s walls...

Thanks, Tristan! Yes, it was a lovely surprise to read it.

Rumour has it there will be reviews of it in the next Orbis and The Interpreters' House too, so I'm not doing badly!

Ros

Yes, congrats both!

Ros

First point: "Print journals often seem more prestigious, but online has a wider reach and a greater chance of longevity. That’s a valuable lesson." Yes!! I'd agree that the all-out rush for publication sometimes damages a poet's progress - many are more concerned about getting into mags t...

Thank you, JJ!

Books available from http://antiphon.org.uk/rb/ or pm me if interested.

Yep, well played Luce!

I don't doubt that you've been distracted. I'm glad things are looking hopeful, JJ - my best wishes too.

I think the poems have a nice sense of progression now.

I think the pun was 'a taste', given the subject of the poem.

Ros.

I think I can be justly proud of this review. I've exchanged a few emails with JR, but I don't really know him - so it's wonderful to know that someone who hasn't read my work before can write such a lovely review.

http://greenmountainsreview.com/review- ... ry-badcoe/

Ros

I liked upper. It had a Homeric feel.

Thanks, Seth. Very pleased you've enjoyed the book.

Ros

Thanks, Tristan, and David, and yes, Angle. And now in The Book, of course.

Ros

I thought perhaps you'd been reading recent Antiphon submissions. I got a bit lost in this bit A hundred thousand wretched letters in imitation of their betters, the unpatched knee, the happening, the purveyors of white space fashion plunging bravely into a chasm, but otherwise very enjoyable. Ros

v2A.

I thought this was effective - a couple of bumps in the rhythm the way I was reading it, but very compelling.

Ros

Well spotted Mac, and thank you!

I like ASP - nearly always find it of interest. And the really fast response time is refreshing.

Ros

Beautiful, and sad.

Do you need 'up'? The rhythm seems better without it.

I like the metaphor, but I wonder if it's more that she is being unpicked, rather than doing the unpicking. But then her brain is also her, so perhaps I'm nit-picking.

Ros

I like the first, works well. Not quite sure I'm getting the metaphor in the second. Do you need the 'but'?

Ros

Just to say I'm very impressed by all of you who have been attempting a poem a day. And some very good poems coming out of it, too. Keep it up.

Ros

I like http://www.righthandpointing.net/ for short poems.

Yes, Algebra of Owls seems appropriate! Nice revision, think it works well now.

Despite it all it is still possible to feel, on waking, that lifting of the spirit, the unspent possibilities reset in darkness like the rain that fell and washed the pavements clean, to know that somehow as you slept the elves had stitched the shoes that let you walk into the light and breathe the ...

JJWilliamson wrote:Thanks, Ros

Yes! Fred's still there, contributing on a regular basis. Where did your paths cross, I wonder. Here?

Best

JJ

No, Wild, I think.