Poetry Forum

Many congrats Celeb. Enjoyed your poem.

Cheers,

Tristan

Hi Morpheus, I like this and think it works very well. I’m not sure I agree with Phil about swapping ‘fuck it’ for ‘sod it’. I like the harshness of ‘fuck it’. I also think your move from first person to third person viewpoint in you second version adds an element of humour to the end of the poem, w...

Hi John,

Yes, this is a lovely poem. A pleasure to read.

…The birds / knot and unknot …

I’m sure I’ve read this image before in another one of your poems. It’s a cracker. Works so well.

Cheers,

Tristan

Hi David, Read this a number of times and what mostly comes across for me is a sense of disconnect and apathy (maybe this is a political poem?). Maybe what you are describing in some way is the state of play now. I would like a few more clues if this poem is meant to hint at more or something else. ...

Hi Morpheus,

I enjoyed this - the rhymes and your well weighted lines. It’s good fun.

who goes ahead and pulls the plug?
Slime’s reaper boy: the slug.

This made me smile.

Nice poem.

Thanks for sharing.

Cheers,

Tristan

Hi David,

Many thanks. Good to see around. Though I’ve only been bobbing in and out myself for the past 3/4 months. Yes, George is very generous.

I thoroughly enjoyed your last collection. Are you putting another together?

Hope life is treating you well.

Cheers,

Tristan

Hi Morpheus,

Many thanks. Sheffield and its Uni are great places. I now live in York and miss Sheffield a great deal. It’s one of the norths well kept secrets - a wonderful place. I don’t think I’ve read your work here either, but I’ll remedy that now.

Cheers,

Tristan

Many thanks Phil. I’d love to read a book of your poetry. You have so many excellent poems to choose from.

Cheers,

Tristan

Many thanks Fliss & Celeb!

Cheers,

Tristan

Hi John, Many thanks. Really pleased you like the cover, title and think the endorsements work well. The cover is a photo I took last year in one of Venice’s many churches (can’t remember which one) when I was there for 3 days with my family. I liked that there was so much missing from the mosaic bu...

Hi All, I’ve just had a book published by The Red Ceilings Press called ‘Ligaments’. These little Red Ceilings books are beautifully produced. I just hope my sequence can live up to their production quality. The sequence is based on a long poem I shared here in the Finishing touch forum. So, many th...

Celeb,

Many congrats. That’s a beautiful poem. I think it’s my favourite of yours. It’s a brilliant concept and so well told. Lovely.

Cheers,

Tristan

Many congrats Fliss. Much enjoyed!

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Tristan

Many congrats Celeb. I start from the position that everyone has prejudices, including myself obviously, and that being honest with ourselves about them is the only way forward to a better world. Enjoyed your poems.

Cheers,

Tristan

Many congrat Phil. Really enjoyed the topic, repetition and rhymes.

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Tristan

Many congrats Phil, Martin and Ray. Enjoyed all you poems.

Cheers,

Tristan

Hi John,

I really like the easy style of this poem. The language sounds unforced and natural. And the poem has a strangely iconic feel about it.

I might cut ‘It’s a windy night’.

Much enjoyed.

Cheers,

Tristan

Hi Everyone,

This is just to let you know that Fliss may be away from the forum for a few days. She has been taken to hospital with a suspected tibia fracture. Cath on Twitter asked me to pass on this message to you all.

Really hope Fliss is ok.

Cheers,

Tristan

Hi Everyone,

This is just to let you know that Fliss may be away from the forum for a few days. She has been taken to hospital with a suspected tibia fracture. Cath on Twitter asked me to pass on this message to you all.

Really hope Fliss is ok.

Cheers,

Tristan

Really pleased you both enjoyed NOON.

Lia, I too like the idea of single line poems. You should try submitting some of yours to NOON.

Cheers,

Tristan

Many congrats Martin, Fliss & David. Thoroughly enjoyed all your poems. Excellent. Another cracking edition of Snakeskin. It’s amazing how George keeps it going.

Cheers,

Tristan

Many congrats Fliss. Much enjoyed as always.

Cheers,

Tristan

Many congrats Ray. Much enjoyed, especially that final couplet.

Cheers,

Tristan

Many congrats Phil. Another good one.

Much enjoyed.

Cheers,

Tristan

Many congrats Celeb. I really like your haiku.

Cheers,

Tristan