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Thanks John! Thanks Caleb, I agree, 'anxieties' does sound rather harsh. As for the 'closure' I'm certainly guilty of unnecessarily embellishing. I'll have a think. To be honest I'm not particularly happy with the poem as a whole. It's very rare two poems come to me, so I needed to get it out there!...

You! A throng of one. Please set your anxieties by the door, then enter this shrouded bethel. Merely here to listen, not to sing a song of knowing, but to kneel beside the threshold, to hold a meagre hand, to cast your shadow in the dim light, and to say as little as you can. To peacefully transfer,...

and if I can get back into writing I’ll consider posting in experienced.

Well I hope you do. It's a hard slog 'getting back into it' I hadn't posted for years, then suddenly...There's no accounting!

Look forward to further posts, your stuff is good.

Cheers
Kris

David, Enjoyed this tale into the seamier side of 'The Dam' I take it to be one of those nights where one is side-lined into a journey one wasn't expecting? I admit to being thrown by but do I remember the wedding? I understand the stag-do connection, but is that line one of significance, or simply ...

Thanks Mac, Really pleased the irony came through, thought it may be lost. Thanks Ryder, I had a bit of Harrison obsession for a short while, especially his (C) Cancer poems and his glorious 'Long Distance' poems. I tried to replicate Long Distance II a number of times, but failed miserably. Cheers ...

Hey Ryder, Really enjoyed this. Poems do tend to get a little drowned on this particular forum, so please don't hesitate to post in 'Experienced' there really isn't much of a distinction. If there was, in comparison to some posts, this poem would certainly belong there. Some great use of language to...

Thanks guys!

I think if wall-climbers were really insensitive then Morpheus would've been on my case.

Ha! Ok, we'll give it a pass then.

Yeah, and his insights and crits about each chosen poet and poems are excellent. He knows his stuff.

He's explaining the source or etymology of the words Avon and Neb.

Ah! Yep, makes sense.

Lia, I rarely comment on your poems, simply because 'long' poems are difficult for me to engage with, that's my failing. But this poem really caught me. I've purposely not read the other comments (coming to this very late) so I find this a poem of flooding, both figuratively and metaphorically, the ...

I think this poem perhaps requires a little too much work from the reader? I guess once the delving and googling is complete, it may be worth the effort? I do appreciate an enigmatic poem, where a feeling or place in time is eventually revealed, but this seems more of a mathematical equation! Cheers...

A fine revision.

Some really evocative language.

I'd question:

The insects in amber.

Surely way deeper, on many levels?

Good stuff indeed.

Hey Ray, Much enjoyed. It kept me engaged throughout. I found "wall climbers" to be a little insensitive, even in context? My favourite part (to which I can much relate) where she mingled with those others who told the wrong kind of stories, with inconclusive endings, whose fancies are pop...

Head of suede
eyes of ruin
your svelte svengali
softness gone.

Now a barnyard savage
your head tattooed
in drunken Latin:
Illegitimi non carborundum

message done.
A clever thug
you have now
become.

Also, the indent amount isn't adjustable.

No, I've tried doubling up and various other variations, stuck with the single indent I'm afraid.

I am using dots to insert the indentations (that's the biggest shortcoming of this software). Just use the 'indent' tab. Concerned not for any comfort save your own, with impudent ease you expand across my bed, confident — now that you've absconded with my heart, you think, delighted with your catc...

Thanks T, that's appreciated. I have to disagree with a point you made in responding to Caleb about the title of the forum. I think it needs something different. Low hanging fruit and all that. I think we may have to put this to a vote? Democracy and all that. The main issue with changing the domain...

"As I climb the stairs to my apartment slowly, due to sciatica and sore knees, I reflect back to when I would bound up stairs two at a time, and wonder if I am better off now than then. Let’s just say that now I know how the story ends, and that is worth something if not a lot. Then I was in th...

So This Is Freedom - You must be joking!

Yet another song reference - The Housemartins.

Sorry, can't help it, your Polemical Poems just beg for references, whether intended or not, for me that's ace. Keep it up.

Cheers
Kris

Pi(d)geons you cry in a passable Scottish accent (dialect unknown) All exclamations are better in Scotch of course! And there were pigeons, as we were balanced on the ledge of A New York apartment building that we’d read about in that Gertrude Stein novel that no-one else has ever read but she got ...

flat without the attendant fame – How dare you! If we're famed for anything, it's being flat. I'll refer you to this poem: https://proleartthreat.co.uk/forum/viewtopic.php?f=3&t=551&p=1738#p1738 Nice work of course, but my appreciation of it lessens because I don't understand the " Sto...

I wasn't entirely sold on the opening line, felt a little flat/lacking in romance, for me. I also wondered if, given the word itself, a few more examples of the books it took you to wouldn't go amiss? Good suggestion, Not. I really like the idea of introducing some books into the mix, makes sense. ...

Thanks T, Don't strange words do it, that lift? They do indeed. "a high Elf from the Silmarillian" I certainly had Tolkien in mind with the second line, perhaps I should expand on that. There are many possibilities. Thanks Mac, In terms of fun perhaps tipsy rather than tossing. Yes I think...