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- Wed Apr 24, 2024 7:11 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Boat Trip
- Replies: 5
- Views: 68
Re: Boat Trip
On first read I thought the alliteration somewhat excessive, but no, once read as a whole it slips and slides wonderfully. Loved the ending: she whispers to me in italics the world will not stay straight. Could be seen as gently humorous, or have darker connotations? Anyhow a fine return, good to se...
- Sun Apr 14, 2024 10:04 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Absent
- Replies: 4
- Views: 120
Re: Absent
Thanks Mac. and I nearly got kicked off for telling the tutor so. Well played sir! I think many of these so called 'courses' are box ticking exercises to get bums on seats and money in the coffers, and ultimately pointless. A shame for those attending who really want to progress with their writing. ...
- Sat Apr 13, 2024 12:08 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Absent
- Replies: 4
- Views: 120
Absent
We agreed to attend the writing course together; of course I knew you wouldn’t appear. ‘I’ll make my own way there’ was a sentence bound in fatality, a lonely sentence. I acquiesced; possessed as I was in the belief that we two may change the world with pith and pen, me almost present - you as Mr Be...
- Fri Apr 12, 2024 5:18 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Ghost-Meat
- Replies: 5
- Views: 134
Re: Ghost-Meat
A fun poem "but somehow correct;" indeed. How the mind wanders to fantastical things! Love the use of 'liminal' a new word to forget. Once in Thailand I came across such a menu, note the: 'Chicken soup poignant' also a shout out for 'Fried Prok with Garlic Paper' https://closetpoet.co.uk/w...
- Mon Apr 01, 2024 10:55 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Bad Dream.
- Replies: 16
- Views: 309
Re: Bad Dream.
Does anyone actually learn anything on this forum, or are we just sniping from our respective preconceptions of what constitutes poetry? A very good point. Harking back to the 'good old days' of this forum. I learnt so much initially on here. All the simple but arguably vital constituents of writin...
- Thu Mar 28, 2024 11:18 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Bad Dream.
- Replies: 16
- Views: 309
Re: Bad Dream.
It's accepting those differences that's the key!Yes, everyone's different.
- Thu Mar 28, 2024 10:25 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Bad Dream.
- Replies: 16
- Views: 309
Re: Bad Dream.
A door opens and no one closes it. *OK. This say to me "THis is poetry." How does the door open? And if it's thanks to a person, which is typical, do you really need "no one" after? I'm not convinced you've thought through the logic of your sentence here. So there MUST be logic ...
- Thu Mar 28, 2024 10:00 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Posting Limit
- Replies: 16
- Views: 222
Re: Posting Limit
If you do, please record your own version of my favourite joke, it goes something like this, in fact it goes exactly like this:I'll have to record an audio.
What did the 0 say to the 8:
Nice belt.
I look forward to it.
- Thu Mar 28, 2024 9:38 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Posting Limit
- Replies: 16
- Views: 222
Re: Posting Limit
Yes, that would be preferable.You should hear me cracking jokes
- Thu Mar 28, 2024 9:25 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Posting Limit
- Replies: 16
- Views: 222
Re: Posting Limit
Facetiousness really suits you John.
Cheers
Kris
Cheers
Kris
- Thu Mar 28, 2024 6:27 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Posting Limit
- Replies: 16
- Views: 222
Re: Posting Limit
and then drop the f bomb to express their somewhat tongue-tied limitations as commenters I'll take that on the nose, probably deserved! That said, I'm a huge fan of profanity. I find the snobbishness and pretensions in poetry almost unbearable sometimes, and certain poets do tend to take themselves...
- Sat Mar 23, 2024 1:31 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: No Ways Tired
- Replies: 6
- Views: 100
Re: No Ways Tired
Thank fuck.This is the last poem in my MS.
i''ve no idea what "MS" means and I found it pretty impenetrable.
As you were.
- Sat Mar 16, 2024 6:09 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Ex Punk
- Replies: 4
- Views: 105
Re: Ex Punk
Thanks guys.
I think you may be right about the punctuation. It seemed to make sense on the page, but when creating graphics, things change.
I'm updating my website and I'm finding creating images allows for much more flexibility in the structure and format, almost like cheating.
Cheers
Kris
I think you may be right about the punctuation. It seemed to make sense on the page, but when creating graphics, things change.
I'm updating my website and I'm finding creating images allows for much more flexibility in the structure and format, almost like cheating.
Cheers
Kris
- Thu Mar 14, 2024 2:47 am
- Forum: Music and Song Lyric Discussion
- Topic: The Chain
- Replies: 3600
- Views: 351235
- Thu Mar 14, 2024 1:30 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Window writes short poem about a girl
- Replies: 2
- Views: 68
- Wed Mar 13, 2024 9:47 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Ex Punk
- Replies: 4
- Views: 105
- Sat Mar 09, 2024 6:28 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Creative impasse
- Replies: 2
- Views: 161
Re: Creative impasse
Thanks Tony, Having recently gone through the big C process, I felt almost compelled to write about it. Alas David recently wrote a series of poems that did the subject far better justice than i could, so thought I'd try a different approach. The idea was a 'meta poem' really. The fact that the N wa...
- Thu Mar 07, 2024 11:25 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Unwrapping the Truth (version 3)
- Replies: 17
- Views: 179
Re: Unwrapping the Truth (version 3)
This is probably the first poem that I've read of yours that has actually used some poetic devices. It's a poem!
It has metaphors and everything...
Good work, crap title.
Cheers
Kris
It has metaphors and everything...
Good work, crap title.
Cheers
Kris
- Thu Mar 07, 2024 11:12 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Bad Moon.
- Replies: 5
- Views: 99
Re: Bad Moon.
I'm not sure why the man is motherless Caleb, I'm guessing it's not a specific man! but 'man' as a whole, that irrefutable connection to in-utero and the inevitable search for self once that connection is lost? On that note, yes the first stanzas worked well, then you drifted into self=pity... Defi...
- Thu Mar 07, 2024 10:37 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Creative impasse
- Replies: 2
- Views: 161
Creative impasse
Ah, writer's block, it’s a certain kind of illness; One that doesn’t warrant sympathy or won’t Immediately kill us, but an illness all the same. It’s cancerous, it grows and I should know – I dropped To nine stone, lost half my facial hair, because I couldn’t form a quatrain or forge a dimeter. But ...
- Sat Feb 24, 2024 1:34 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Mastermind Haiku Subverted (7 5 7)
- Replies: 2
- Views: 69
Re: Mastermind Haiku Subverted (7 5 7)
Thanks John.
- Fri Feb 16, 2024 11:27 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Mastermind Haiku Subverted (7 5 7)
- Replies: 2
- Views: 69
Mastermind Haiku Subverted (7 5 7)
Your specialist subject is:
Disney Princesses.
We have failed as a nation.
Disney Princesses.
We have failed as a nation.
- Fri Feb 09, 2024 11:42 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Winter-Walk.
- Replies: 3
- Views: 101
Re: Winter-Walk.
Hey T, Enjoyed, echoing a bit of Mr Frost? I think the rhymes work well on the whole. Particularly enjoyed: I know that it’s their delight to speak loudly but not say a word. Captures their essence well! Interesting rhyme with 'causes and 'caws', nifty. My one nit would be the colloquial use of 'any...
- Sat Jan 27, 2024 12:30 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Postcard from memory.
- Replies: 6
- Views: 488
Re: Postcard from memory.
An enigmatic piece, which i really enjoyed trying to suss out and will continue to do so, until I've found the version that suits me.
Caleb - That's the kind of poem this is.
Cheers
Kris
Caleb - That's the kind of poem this is.
Makes no sense though?There is the door-mat
that night has taken hold of
its antecedents.
Cheers
Kris
- Fri Jan 26, 2024 11:48 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Dave of the Antarctic
- Replies: 6
- Views: 537
Re: Dave of the Antarctic
Thanks guys. I think the idea for the poem was infinitely more fascinating than the execution: A guy suffering from dementia written from the perspective of his wife. His potential journey outside - never to return (captain Oates style) and who's sacrifice it really was? So with that in mind I think...