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- Thu May 02, 2024 12:50 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: That Old Familiar
- Replies: 9
- Views: 62
Re: That Old Familiar
When I asked about the point of grammar, I was not offering a criticism of the poem. I was generally curious about the grammatical point that line raised. Now that I understand the poem a bit better, I definitely like it. I do want to say, though, that the intensely personal poems often make good ca...
- Thu May 02, 2024 12:42 am
- Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
- Topic: Snakeskin (May)
- Replies: 3
- Views: 25
Re: Snakeskin (May)
Yes, congratulations to John. Very interesting poem! A dose of reality certainly. I like the point that you make at the end, that nature overtakes everything after man's periodic orgasmic destructive conflicts. Nature never stops.
If David and Fliss ever return here, congratulations to you too.
If David and Fliss ever return here, congratulations to you too.
- Wed May 01, 2024 9:57 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Homecoming
- Replies: 12
- Views: 132
Re: Homecoming
Thank you, John! And thank you again for looking at this!
- Tue Apr 30, 2024 7:06 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: That Old Familiar
- Replies: 9
- Views: 62
Re: That Old Familiar
Now that I know who Penguin is, I hope you'll include that explanation as a footnote when you submit the poem for publication. I'm looking at the poem again. "Every day there’s birthday candles for someone I’ll never know" Just a question of grammar: Shouldn't that read ... Every day there...
- Tue Apr 30, 2024 6:49 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Homecoming
- Replies: 12
- Views: 132
Re: Homecoming
So "nostos" means "homecoming" in Greek? I know that some of the books of the Bible are written in Greek, but using a Greek word seems odd. However, naming the poem "Nostos" will certainly make me look more erudite than I am. Google Translate isn't giving me "homec...
- Tue Apr 30, 2024 6:45 pm
- Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
- Topic: Noon Journal of the Short Poem
- Replies: 10
- Views: 53
Re: Noon Journal of the Short Poem
Congratulations, Phil.
- Tue Apr 30, 2024 6:41 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Homecoming
- Replies: 12
- Views: 132
Re: Homecoming
Thanks for looking in, John. I thought this poem would be up your alley since God is in it. "You've got 'about' becoming 'of' in your clauses, you might want to stick to one preposition." Originally I had this: bleating about splendid lands, about better meals to be had, ... but then I rem...
- Tue Apr 30, 2024 6:33 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Object Permanence
- Replies: 10
- Views: 89
Re: Object Permanence
No need to look at Homecoming if you don't want to.
I think you should participate freely here, though keep your new-poem posts to a level where the few members who are participating can keep up. If you are not feeling wanted here any more, that's not coming from me.
I think you should participate freely here, though keep your new-poem posts to a level where the few members who are participating can keep up. If you are not feeling wanted here any more, that's not coming from me.
- Tue Apr 30, 2024 3:41 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Object Permanence
- Replies: 10
- Views: 89
Re: Object Permanence
I like the poem, John. I think is works very well. One thing, though. It says that the baby is playing peak-a-boo, but isn't it the mother who is playing peak-a-boo? Isn't it the mother's hands that are opening and closing? ========== Sorry to bring up one of my own poems, but I thought you might li...
- Tue Apr 30, 2024 3:29 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: That Old Familiar
- Replies: 9
- Views: 62
Re: That Old Familiar
Maybe this is just my usual denseness, but I'm not grasping the poem -- though I do like the language.
Who is the Penguin?
Who is the Penguin?
- Sun Apr 28, 2024 3:14 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Things That Won't Stop Until They Stop
- Replies: 5
- Views: 69
Re: Things That Won't Stop Until They Stop
Thank you, guys, for voting that I not trash it.
I write so few poems that I really can't afford to trash any poem that I can fix, so I am going to try to fix the poem. Your criticisms are spot on.
I write so few poems that I really can't afford to trash any poem that I can fix, so I am going to try to fix the poem. Your criticisms are spot on.
- Wed Apr 24, 2024 7:21 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Things That Won't Stop Until They Stop
- Replies: 5
- Views: 69
Re: Things That Won't Stop Until They Stop
I think you made some good observations, Ray. Thank you.
Now that I read it again. I think it should go in the bin.
Now that I read it again. I think it should go in the bin.
- Wed Apr 24, 2024 7:38 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Things That Won't Stop Until They Stop
- Replies: 5
- Views: 69
Things That Won't Stop Until They Stop
Things That Won’t Stop Until They Stop My heart won’t stop doing the jitterbug. I’m not sure why it’s so much alive, constantly moving like a hyperactive child. This is my old age, time to relax, so why is part of me always at a dance? It needs to conserve itself for important things, like when tha...
- Tue Apr 23, 2024 4:05 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Homecoming
- Replies: 12
- Views: 132
Re: Homecoming
Thank you, Phil. That was lukewarm, but I'll take it.
I'm surprised John isn't saying something. He's the Godman.
I'm surprised John isn't saying something. He's the Godman.
- Tue Apr 23, 2024 7:04 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Homecoming
- Replies: 12
- Views: 132
Re: Homecoming
Well, you're intelligent enough to be able to evaluate a poem on a subject that doesn't interest you. But you shouldn't say more unless you want to.
- Tue Apr 23, 2024 3:46 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Homecoming
- Replies: 12
- Views: 132
Re: Homecoming
Thank you, Phil. Besides that, does the poem work for you?
- Sun Apr 21, 2024 11:17 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Houses of the Holy
- Replies: 6
- Views: 143
Re: Houses of the Holy
This is the type of poem that doesn't quite say straight out what it's about, but expects the reader to apply his own interpretation. It took me a few readings, but I finally did that, and now the poem has meaning to me. My suggestion is to eliminate a few extraneous words: Now The tramps are sittin...
- Sun Apr 21, 2024 2:17 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Homecoming
- Replies: 12
- Views: 132
Homecoming
Lost and Found God is pleased to be mocked, something not well understood, for his greatest joy is in reunions, those homecomings when his rebellious sheep wander back from their reckless ventures, bleating about splendid lands, of better meals to be had, and making audacious demands, but also reme...
- Sat Apr 20, 2024 3:52 pm
- Forum: Music and Song Lyric Discussion
- Topic: Favorite Songs
- Replies: 31
- Views: 356
Re: Favorite Songs
So who sang the Hippie song? It doesn't sound like Gabriel. When posting a song, it would be helpful to mention the singer.
- Sat Apr 20, 2024 3:48 pm
- Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
- Topic: New poem in Amethyst Review!
- Replies: 4
- Views: 51
Re: New poem in Amethyst Review!
Congratulations, John. Interesting poem.
- Fri Apr 19, 2024 3:21 pm
- Forum: Music and Song Lyric Discussion
- Topic: Favorite Songs
- Replies: 31
- Views: 356
Re: Favorite Songs
That's Peter Gabriel ??? It sounds nothing like the Peter Gabriel I've been listening to. From what I can see of the picture, it doesn't even look like him. He must have come out with that when he was very young.
Reminder: Other people are free to post their favorite songs here.
Reminder: Other people are free to post their favorite songs here.
- Thu Apr 18, 2024 11:26 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Fahrenheit, Not Celsius (version 5 -- new ending)
- Replies: 17
- Views: 346
Re: Fahrenheit, Not Celsius (version 5 -- new ending)
Thanks so much for looking in again, Phil, and for taking the time to read the previous version to make a good comparison. Yes, I love the new ending. It's a keeper for me. "but it keeps me lying awake at night" -- I can't let go of that line. But I also miss the bare legs ending. I'll see...
- Thu Apr 18, 2024 2:37 pm
- Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
- Topic: Ray and Phil in Flight of the Dragonfly
- Replies: 8
- Views: 90
Re: Ray and Phil in Flight of the Dragonfly
Congratulations! Good poems, Phil.
- Thu Apr 18, 2024 10:41 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Fahrenheit, Not Celsius (version 5 -- new ending)
- Replies: 17
- Views: 346
Re: Fahrenheit, Not Celsius (version 5 -- new ending)
I have re-imagined this poem with a new ending. I hope you'll take a look.
- Wed Apr 17, 2024 4:50 pm
- Forum: Music and Song Lyric Discussion
- Topic: Favorite Songs
- Replies: 31
- Views: 356
Re: Favorite Songs
I just noticed the videos you posted, John, but I'm going to bed, so I'll listen to them later. In the mean time, here is Peter Gabriel's "Your Eyes". He has performed this song multiple times, and it is always a big production when he does. If you haven't heard it, I think you'll love it....