A frost has seized upon the sun,
small fingers grip a willing earth,
to dance off white, for in its worth,
lies the grace of a ballerina's run!
I'm unsure of its 'quality' but don't consider myself new to poetry soooo i hope it's ok to post here.
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- Sat Dec 06, 2014 3:08 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Dancer
- Replies: 4
- Views: 1549
- Sun Aug 17, 2014 9:35 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: The way that I danced with you
- Replies: 0
- Views: 1424
The way that I danced with you
The way that I danced with you A form of uncompromising closenss, lost in sweat dancing, to god knows what, embracing again. So high I forget how high I am, hearing only my own movements, seeing yours. Sweat, a “half formed thought” that we were already played this one tonight; or that they should....
- Wed Aug 13, 2014 2:40 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: another rant ...
- Replies: 3
- Views: 1619
Re: another rant ...
well mine neither !!
the words means - my will i myself god, butr translates as "i wanted to beat god" - according to google translate.
the words means - my will i myself god, butr translates as "i wanted to beat god" - according to google translate.
- Sat Aug 09, 2014 2:35 pm
- Forum: Any Other Business
- Topic: how do dictionaries work, really
- Replies: 0
- Views: 1876
how do dictionaries work, really
if i look up fearsome
Fearsome \Fear"some\ (f[=e]r"s[u^]m) a. 1. Frightful
then look up frightful
Informal. very great; extreme: That actor is very talented but a frightful ham
can i conclude that i may say that i am fearsome stupid, without striking fear?
Fearsome \Fear"some\ (f[=e]r"s[u^]m) a. 1. Frightful
then look up frightful
Informal. very great; extreme: That actor is very talented but a frightful ham
can i conclude that i may say that i am fearsome stupid, without striking fear?
- Tue Aug 05, 2014 5:56 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: D O D G E M S
- Replies: 0
- Views: 1431
D O D G E M S
“D O D G E M S” Happy birthday! A Bass Drum thumps over trance; fun, but not “dodging”, unable to, the turn is too big. Off, and bump. I alight, family stricken; it is not my birthday, I don't have to pretend anything, only smile. The host explodes again, it IS his birthday, a special “he has surge...
- Tue Aug 05, 2014 4:43 am
- Forum: Poetry Exercises
- Topic: Meter / tin ears
- Replies: 4
- Views: 7993
Re: Meter / tin ears
i don't think that's the issue; i don't think the issue is being tone deaf. i think it's that i'm not compellingly musical.
- Tue Aug 05, 2014 4:24 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: A fetish
- Replies: 12
- Views: 3466
Re: A fetish
Suzanne - thanks, i think your edit is a good improvement.
bodkin, can you explain show don't tell, pls? not examples, but a specifi defintion ?
bodkin, can you explain show don't tell, pls? not examples, but a specifi defintion ?
- Sun Aug 03, 2014 1:26 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: another rant ...
- Replies: 3
- Views: 1619
another rant ...
Mea volente Egomet Deo We play by the side of the Thames, happy enough with my niece. She falls, we pick her up; it's all very easy to maintain, a distance from each other without resentment. Now and then I remind myself how silly it is - how silence is like a lie or how alone I am in my own head, ...
- Thu Jul 31, 2014 11:20 pm
- Forum: Poetry Discussion
- Topic: brutalism
- Replies: 0
- Views: 1832
brutalism
Daytripper by Adelle Stripe. The bed of Cock Beck is grey; oil, drip-dropped from the motorway planes, into the drain holes, into the Beck. My father stares into the water, talks of the pike, the trout, the chub, he caught and fed to us over the years. When mayflies danced to their own reflection, ...
- Thu Jul 31, 2014 9:01 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: A fetish
- Replies: 12
- Views: 3466
Re: A fetish
interesting replies, TU... the definition of fetish is a reading of das kapital - are these strophes not instances of fetishism ?
- Tue Jul 29, 2014 9:04 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: A fetish
- Replies: 12
- Views: 3466
Re: A fetish
ts eltio? but it's irrelevant, i'm no classicist etc
- Tue Jul 29, 2014 1:46 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: A fetish
- Replies: 12
- Views: 3466
Re: A fetish
what im GOING for:
conversational rhythms
structured like a plurality of voices - not diffeent tones really but developing the poem as it were part of a dialogue, but still making sense.
and a sense of violent excess...
i won't try exlaining why ! but .. ?
conversational rhythms
structured like a plurality of voices - not diffeent tones really but developing the poem as it were part of a dialogue, but still making sense.
and a sense of violent excess...
i won't try exlaining why ! but .. ?
- Mon Jul 28, 2014 3:25 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: painful words
- Replies: 3
- Views: 1563
Re: painful words
ur right - it is a damp squib if you don't at least guess it's someone else.
- Sun Jul 27, 2014 7:07 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: A fetish
- Replies: 12
- Views: 3466
Re: A violent moving into the present
ok, i'm sorry for the typos.
i'm trying to write stuff that is more dynamic / energetic, than self consciously poetic - as bodkin has called my verses before.
i'm trying to write stuff that is more dynamic / energetic, than self consciously poetic - as bodkin has called my verses before.
- Sat Jul 26, 2014 2:20 pm
- Forum: Poetry Discussion
- Topic: Another Poetry Forum
- Replies: 8
- Views: 5324
Re: Another Poetry Forum
WRT the auto-critique in the op, it's probably laden with ironic tone - in their imagination hah
- Sat Jul 26, 2014 11:22 am
- Forum: Poetry Discussion
- Topic: Another Poetry Forum
- Replies: 8
- Views: 5324
Re: Another Poetry Forum
i think anyone that says i'm "flatly denying relaity" in dismissing their criticism,,, is mad and that they have fallen into their own egotism, quite some time ago.
- Sat Jul 26, 2014 4:00 am
- Forum: Poetry Discussion
- Topic: Another Poetry Forum
- Replies: 8
- Views: 5324
Re: Another Poetry Forum
i got banned from pigpen for literally nothing besides arguing that 'canto' is almost synonymous with pound's cantos. i tried another one,,, the top hit. i didn't much like it, maybe just the colour scheme tho :D here is OK, no-one is commenting on my poems and a couple of people have misunderstood ...
- Sat Jul 26, 2014 3:18 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: A fetish
- Replies: 12
- Views: 3466
A fetish
A fetish is when a doing is a having [tab][/tab] A violent movement into the present. A wound, or countdown, or a momentary sense of being ill at ease. The heat of midsummer will evoke a fan's circling the corners of my room, while at night I smoke to numb complacencies. [tab][/tab] I finish a ciga...
- Sat Jul 26, 2014 12:55 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: painful words
- Replies: 3
- Views: 1563
Re: painful words
My constant surrender Egotism spewsforth these ecrits, [tab][/tab]annulling me; a cancelled appointment, or a thuderclap. [tab][/tab]Do you know what, I'm bored of you. [tab][/tab]I could never stomach his cathartic fits, the sudden reality, or my constant surrender to them. ---- trying to begin to...
- Thu Jul 24, 2014 4:36 pm
- Forum: Poetry Discussion
- Topic: John Ashbery
- Replies: 13
- Views: 5566
Re: John Ashbery
any tips on how to read / interpret an ashbery poem?
- Thu Jul 24, 2014 8:29 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: moving on [WAS -it is as if she loved me]
- Replies: 1
- Views: 1146
moving on [WAS -it is as if she loved me]
Moving on This weakness has possessed me all day. I cannot remember a time in which it made sense, when I felt like my weight was my own; a weakness as old as the world spinning against it. Only my psychosis puts up no struggle in the embrace, its memory a nauseating reoccurence of people who have ...
- Thu Jul 24, 2014 12:28 am
- Forum: Any Other Business
- Topic: is the following the cure to nihilism?
- Replies: 1
- Views: 2014
is the following the cure to nihilism?
please don't be a nihilist.
please.
no, please, for me
please.
no, please, for me
- Mon Jul 21, 2014 4:51 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: painful words
- Replies: 3
- Views: 1563
painful words
Painful words There is much vanity in these ecrits; as everything is forgettable, so I forget my place among them. A thunderclap, or a mistimed appointment. Do you know what I'm bored of you. I would prefer not to pretend I disagree: there is a kind of authenticity to his fits a momentary quality in...
- Sun Jul 20, 2014 7:05 pm
- Forum: Poetry Discussion
- Topic: dylan thomas in the 21st century
- Replies: 2
- Views: 2324
dylan thomas in the 21st century
how relevant is he?
i'm reading some now, and he seems a nice foil to some of the contrivance of contemporary poetry, but his verse does stumble along here and there.
energetic, visceral, or bombastic or..?
i'm reading some now, and he seems a nice foil to some of the contrivance of contemporary poetry, but his verse does stumble along here and there.
energetic, visceral, or bombastic or..?
- Sat Jul 19, 2014 2:20 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: totally gratuitous poem
- Replies: 0
- Views: 1383
totally gratuitous poem
Crossing μετά I don't think there's ever been a poet as good as me, the idea of equality belonging only to the rich, and successful. All that time on retroactive surfaces, “why not ask – if it bothers you”. It'd be so irreversible, like a cult, and a rhyme is a line of flight, or a capital letter. ...