Poetry Forum

This is a fab thread. Thanks K-j, I had only read Norwegian Wood so will be re-visiting Murakami. Also Kate Atkinson. For short stories it has to be AL Kennedy, I've just started her latest collection "all the rage" - as always not much happens (in the action sense) but is deliciously writ...

am loving this. I sea swim all year round so am a sucker for this material, but think your execution is perfect - succinct and tight. I also like the no underwear - prefer this to naked. My only quibble would be the jellyfish comment - explaining what isn't there doesn't help me see what is there. T...

Hey Mac, There's lots to like here, but the rhythm and rhyme do let it down. It draws you in, gets you going at a pace, then sends you tumbling over yourself. i think if you're going to use this type of structure you need to be much tighter - so i would suggest either going for the fully structured ...

Thanks Mac - much appreciated!! I do tend to over explain things.

Nicky B.

Hey C, Liked S1. Although not too sure about sequestered - secluded? Cloistered? Mmmmm, some thought needed there. Am loving the dialogue it's induced. David that link is fabulous, very entertaining. Please please have another go at the middle section - i'm eagerly awaiting that. Thanks for the thou...

Hi Mike, a few thoughts on this. Like the others have said the line breaks need some attention. i also felt the content was a bit confused. You were clearly looking at the brook thinking of time passing by (S1) but then you start to discuss gravity. The "urgent call" seems to switch from t...

And you can make a rather bizarre cordial with the flowers - think fusty sweet coconuts. Not terribly conducive to kissing. Will be happier once the elderflower arrives, but for now it'll do.

Thanks so much all, This is the first thing I've written in months so it's a huge boost to get such a positive response. The idea behind this is that love starts with a kiss, and that brings a gradual decomposition of body and mind. Either a gradual rot that seeps through you (like a bruised apples)...

From honeyed skin
stem bruised apple kisses,
lips firm with promise
indent my spine.

The flesh beneath
lies darkly sweetened,
inexorably spreading,
tenderised.

Hi Seth, I'm a little rusty, have been struggling to read and write but this really drew me in. There's something very compulsive about the flow, and intriguing about the subject matter. It's interesting reading the others interpretation. Mine was originally that this was an admissions team for the ...

Very nice, but if you're gonna hi-de-ho it's always gonna have to be Cab......

Hurrah for inept social weebling on both our parts! Let the kiss chain continue....... Shadwell - I have a ridiculous and shameful crush on that track, I was compulsively listening to it for months and nearly ended up divorced!! David - those lyrics are absolutely appalling, but I'm wondering if the...

Oooops, sorry David, these are absolutely your lines - I thought you'd like this track so I married it with your lines. I loved this couplet of yours. This was my clunky, and possibly misguided, way of saying hello. I'll just to stick "hello" in future. Is this a faux pas on my part? Would...

....it must be kissing season (David's lines -not mine!!)

An antidote to the above.

Gotta love the bee..

Oh come on, it has to be superfly. I know it's obvious but it's bloody brilliant too. [youtube]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=-cmo6MRYf5g&list=AL94UKMTqg-9BgifFbPmeJ7R_xN-lXmxpY&index=2[/youtube] But to be a little more interesting I will also add........ http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=KtzRJ...

Are you sure? Was alcohol involved?

John Peel's favourite band you know - so you are in good company

This is great - I have nothing to add as I've never heard anything quite like this. Sorry! Enjoyed it muchly though!

Nicky B.

Blue grass? Not sure how you'd define this. She has a fab voice........

Thanks David - nice to hear from you too. Oooo Pressure Drop, yes, that has to be one of the best. And liking Livingstone too. Back to the roots a bit.... http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=DDfvXrMnJu0 This is also one of my favourites. It has many versions, but to my appalling ear this one edges toward...

Nothing fancy, nothing funny, just some guaranteed sunshine on a rainy day.

*gasp* *gulp* *gasp*

Really do you think? Playing the long game? It can't be. It was never consummated so I'm sure if this was the case he would have tried again.

I can't comment on the quality of the poetry I'm afraid, I'm too preoccupied sharply in taking my breath.

Can't add to this - but have been really enjoying the music - thank you for the education! (gives me even less faith in Baz's Gatsby, but you never can tell).

Ah, maybe I should be less cynical. It's just that I love the book and generally loathe Hollywood. It never seems to manage "dark" very well. I can't see him including any 20s jazz in there - it's all going to be shitty disco music isn't it? We might have to take this outside to the music ...

Oooo, and having found this thread, my recommendation would be The Princess Bride - book by William Goldman, film by someone else (I have no idea who). Both two of my favourites.

Nicky B.