Poetry Forum

I think you were right to dump the tv bit, it took me outside, distanced from the personal, and the poem is better for the edit in my view. It is still a clever image, perhaps for another poem.

Phil

This water of life burns a malted mind. I am this grain. To curse a day, and grind these hours, smell my breath and know my night. Its whispered grip will blur the cliche light, retire this wrinkled reason, find deep sleep. No dreams for me. I drink and drink it neat. Such steeping, toasting, mashin...

I have a poem appearing here...


https://www.crowstepjournal.com/phil-wood

Congratulations Caleb.

Cheers Tristan.

Particularly liked the closing seven lines Tristan.

Enjoyed

Phil

Just want to highlight the fact that Ray has some quality poems in this publication as well guys.

Congratulations to John, Ray, Fliss and David. A feast of their poetry in this month's Snakeskin.

https://snakeskinpoetry.co.uk/

Cheers Caleb

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Real football is in div 2 and mid table mediocrity!

Cheers. Buddhism is one interpretation. Personally, I prefer oblivion.

Nah, it is about cash (not your right back), and which day of the week to play (and pick up injuries), and players get better by playing better players (I know all the clichés...particular hates... reference to heroes and 'putting his body on the line').

Interesting Ray (triggered a thought of the 'other' poster here). Agree, identity is not a singular, though I say this without thinking about the splits in psychology. Like how you play with distancing here, beginning with that fun/menacing opening line. eulogies for boozers reassigned as mosques ke...

Cheers John. A second round on me

I have a poem appearing here, on page 27:

https://issuu.com/noonpress/docs/noon_25


Phil

Enjoyed Ray. Had a Cooper Clark vibe (at least in my head).

Congrats

Phil

Things That Won’t Stop Until They Stop My heart won’t stop doing the jitterbug. I’m not sure why it’s so much alive, constantly moving like a hyperactive child. This is my old age, time to relax, so why is part of me always at a dance? It needs to conserve itself for important things, like when tha...

Agree with Kris on the excellent ending, though perhaps a quieter touch on the sibilance and canopy/haphazardly/floaty could do with one less. Liked the shimmer of cars and buses, lets hope the summer haze comes soon!